Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team).

With the accelerating development of our society, arts and athletics have been playing two critical roles in our daily life. It is hard to judge which has more significance. Some people contend that the government should allocate enough fund to support the athletes when it comes to their contribution to our society and inspiring people to stay in the prime of their health. However, from my perspective and actual observation of the life makes me believe that the government should advocate the arts because it is the only way to express the culture and civilization of our society. I will try to elaborate on my point of view below.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that Arts effect and role are indisputable in improving the culture of any society as it is the only significant place for a county because it displays both tradition and culture of that community. Art activities like art galleries and exhibitions could be held in cities. This kind of events fill the free hours of people in a valuable way, and people could bring their children to these activities, which children’s culture and knowledge about history and art are improved after visiting such places. What is more, overseas can easily get an idea about the past and the present condition of that country by visiting many art exhibitions, and museums instead of reading a 100-page book to learn. Also, theaters and cinemas are also considered in this area. If we eliminate these kinds of sites from any town, the quality of life plunge there. I will an example from my experience to shed the light on that subject, I remember when I was a child there is a cinema in our city which our parents brought us to there every weekend. We watched a lot of movies and masterpieces of cinema which contribute a significant role in our culture. After a while, this cinema was closed because of some financial problems. We couldn’t imagine our weekend without going to the cinema and watching movies. Fortunately, municipality of town bought that place therefore, the cinema could continue to work. This example of my own life illustrates how and why governments should support the artistic activities and places in cities.

Another reason that deserves more word is that athletics could get sponsors from non-governmental companies. We all know most of sports teams can get sponsors because of their ability to rich a lot of people from broadcasting their matches from media. These companies most of the time compete with each other to be a sponsor of a sports team. Therefore, the money problem of sports teams is less than art activities. On the other hand, art activities could not get sponsors like sports teams; therefore, this duty belongs to governments. To give an example to shed light on that subject, Nike is a big company which producing sports clothes, is the sponsor of most sports teams, even the more infamous ones like state teams. But I think Nike is not a sponsor of an art exhibition of a very famous artist. Not only, Nike, but it is also same for most of the companies.

The last but not the least, It is good for the government to support art since it a great way to attract tourists since most of the tourists are being drawn to the county which has a significant civilization and the art exhibitions and museums are the only way to express any community civilization. By doing so, the government can get a lot of revenue which can be used to build many infrastructures which help to improve the people's living condition.
As all things considered, the government should spend money to support the art because the arts are the symbol of the society's civilization, it is the way to make our county more appealing to the visitors.

As all things considered, the government should spend money to support the art because the arts are the symbol of the society's civilization, it is the way to make our county more appealing to the visitors.

Average: 8.4 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...of events fill the free hours of people in a valuable way, and people could bring their children ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, i think, kind of, what is more, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3273.0 1977.66487455 165% => OK
No of words: 682.0 407.700716846 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7991202346 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.11029644095 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76651869681 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429618768328 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1033.2 618.680645161 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2261825358 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.862068966 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5172413793 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51724137931 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
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Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22246930396 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611437002789 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587785704099 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141778454908 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589471459485 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
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Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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