Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are differing opinions on whether the government should spend more money in support of the arts or athletics. Some people argue that it is the arts should be developed by the funds of the government, for they believe the arts can bring joy to their lives. Other people, however, think that athletics need more financial support from the government because the athletes would bring honor to the country if they win the Olympic games. I, myself, agree with the latter one as the advantage of supporting athletics outweighs the arts by the following reasons.
In the first place, the champion of the Olympic games brings honor to the country let alone the athlete him/herself. But it is well-known that to win the Olympic games is far more difficult for the athletes. There is a fat chance for the country to cultivate prominent athletes if the government does not try its utmost to nurture the athlete and their team with considerable investment. Such as offering a decent and well-functioned training field, hiring the best and professional coaches. With such a better environment and equipment, it is more likely to witness the advent of the world champion in the Olympic games.
Secondly, financial support of the government, if the training facilities and fields could open to the public, will not only benefit the athletes, but also the local. Since the athlete is chosen from the public through fierce competition, the proportion of excellent athletes is equal to the public that gets involved in the sport. The public is given access to the resource, which offers them the opportunity to get to know some Olympic sports and how to take exercise. As a result, it would be a benign cycle of human recourse in sport
Thirdly, with the development of economy, the arts have played a role in people’s daily lives. Considering the arts can enhance the life quality, improve the ability to appreciate beauty, and allow the individual experience more of the world, it would be so hard to keep the arts away from our lives and it is possible that the arts could be alienated without the support from the government. However, the arts are not a common thing for most people when compare with sports. It is less difficult for people to watch a game or participate in a sports activity than appreciate some artworks in an art exhibition. The fruit of devotion of money would be faster and effective than the arts. I have reason to believe the government prefers to see the result in a quick way.
To sum up, spending more money on the Olympic team would exert influence on the country in a better way. No matter the position of sport in the world or the health of the public, I have reason to believe it is worthy of investing more money to the athletics rather than the arts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 550, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ple to watch a game or participate in a sports activity than appreciate some artworks ...
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Line 4, column 760, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a quick way" with adverb for "quick"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he government prefers to see the result in a quick way. To sum up, spending more money on the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to the athletics rather than the arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, such as, as a result, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76239669421 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62287915892 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46694214876 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2187972222 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295649512617 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923406937777 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736480276678 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166739519309 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909118295755 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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