Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Going to museums and looking at works of art is something I enjoy doing. But I believe that governments should concentrate on funding athletes in their quests for Olympic glory much more than they should be paying artists.
For one thing, the athletes at the Olympics represent our country, so we should support them as much as possible. By winning Olympic gold, an athlete can bring glory and honor to all of the people in the country, not just him or her. I know that I personally feel a sense of pride when someone from my country wins a gold, silver, or bronze medal. Even though I did not do anything myself, it makes me feel proud to see one of my countrymen competing and winning. For the sake of honor, it is imperative that we support our country's Olympic athletes.
The best athletes in the world compete at the Olympics, so we need to send our own country's best athletes to face them. They can only achieve victory, however, if they have enough funds to train properly. Training for the Olympics is not cheap. Teams and athletes need special facilities and equipment, and the coaches and staff members need to receive salaries for their work. Since there are few competitions throughout the year for paying customers to attend, governments need to provide the necessary money for these athletes. This will enable them to train year-round and to reach their potential.
It is also important to remember that most Olympic athletes are amateurs and therefore receive salaries. It is incumbent upon the government to fund them on behalf of the sacrifices they are making. A typical Olympic athlete spends years in training. I read an article about how many of them spend time away from their schools, friends, and families just to train for Olympic glory. Some even spend their own money, which is something that they simply should not have to do. The government should reward their sacrifices by subsidizing the costs of their training.
While the arts are important, the Olympics should take priority when it comes to funding because the team represents the nation, it requires the best training, and the athletes need to be supported for their sacrifices. Glory comes with a high price, and that is one that the government should meet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...an athlete can bring glory and honor to all of the people in the country, not just him or ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'countrys the best'.
Suggestion: countrys the best
...he Olympics, so we need to send our own countrys best athletes to face them. They can only ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, while, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82428940568 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49933455345 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527131782946 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2633789386 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9047619048 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09523809524 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196634236602 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629945643614 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498900590658 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124735485494 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405375044395 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.