Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend money on improving internet access rather than improving public transportation.
Even though a vast majority of people explicitly state that governments have to expend more money in order to enhance internet access than to improve public transportation, there are still some people who utterly oppose this stance. From my point of view, fostering internet access entails more boons, and I uphold this idea for two core reasons, which are elucidated below.
Internet, in the first place, is more vital for modern society since most of the devices highly depend on it, and even public transportations need internet. A compelling example of this argument is my country; In Azerbaijan buses, metros, railways all depend on internet since devices utilized in order to control roads require internet. Furthermore, dissemination of internet renders companies, restaurants- altogether, work places to depend on internet otherwise they will lose their customers, or not be much productive. Take, for instance, a company akin to Amazon, which tend to sell products via online websites. If they lose their internet connection, even for one hour, they will acquire an array of negative feedbacks, not to mention lose their reputation among people; thus, fostering internet access will lessen the probability of this type of situations.
In addition, according to a research conducted by an esteemed university, it became evident that people are prone to prefering internet to public transportations, and besides, they will be more satisfied with the improvement of internet rather than improvement of buses, metros and etcetera. Taking into account that the chief objective of governments is rendering their citizens to be content, internet access becomes one of the priorities of country. Moreover, interned access is also fundamental for technology since technology itself depends on internet. A lucid example that sheds the spotlight on this thesis is cell phones; in order to improve cell phones, companies are endeavoring to add features, and they need strong internet connection. Consequently, without internet access it is arduous to enhance anything.
In light of thoughts elaborated upon, I would like to conclude that internet is integral part of twenty-first century, so governments have to spend their budget so as to render internet access prevalent. A philosopher, whose name eludes my mind right now, once mentioned, "internet has tremendous impact on everything, and having problem regarding internet can engender a myriad of drawbacks in every field".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, still, thus, as to, for instance, in addition, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52480417755 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99679536701 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590078328982 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7374389525 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.142857143 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3571428571 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243819644141 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870158810378 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642430872135 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158786323977 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649163076652 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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