Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate regarding whether government should prefer for spending capital in support of arts or athletics. In my opinion, state should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. I feel this for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, Olympic teams compete in international level, thus having a chance of country to be recognized whole over the world. People generally follow big tournaments like Olympic games and world cups rather than arts. So, when a country spends more money in such athletics, they can draw attention of people worldwide. For instance, India always participated in Mr. Olympia, which is the biggest bodybuilding competition in the world but never qualified. Recently, the country is investing a lot of capital on the game. Moreover, a number of state competitions and regional level competitions are being held to motivate young bodybuilders. Finally, Mukesh Gahlot, a 42 year bodybuilder fetched first gold medal in Mr. Olympia power-lifting competition in 2018. After this a lot of aspirants are expected to qualify and win medals for the country. If the government hadn't spent money to create the platform for the bodybuilders, this would be an arduous road for them. Now India is also known for producing huge bodybuilders and fitness enthusiasts.
Secondly, big tournaments that is played among many different countries helps to bring revenues, which is one thing that state always wants in return of investment. As I said above, after India started investing huge amount of capital in bodybuilding competitions, number of players from around the world are coming in the country to compete. Not only players, but also renowned coaches and eminent bodybuilding supplement companies have drawn their keen attention towards the country's investment. Establishment of number of gyms by international companies and number of authorized distributors of fitness supplements inside the country is a strong evident of rise in market value. All this helps to increase the country's revenue in many different forms including tax. Supplement products made in US and UK are very expensive so they have to pay huge amount of tax before entering Indian market. Also, number of Indian supplement industries is also rising which directly contributes to the economy of the country.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that governments should spend more capital in promoting athletics who compete in international tournaments like Olympic games and World cup. This is because; it provides a beautiful platform for the country to be recognized in the world and also helps to contribute in country's economy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32093023256 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97987117736 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551162790698 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3588056944 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95454545455 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151296476861 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503028126157 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10365245459 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136207017388 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142470198596 0.0645574589148 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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