Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of society, the construction of the country becomes a salient question for modern people. It is claimed that governments ought to provide more money to support arts than to athletics. However I am strongly opposed of this proposal.
First of all, athletics and arts are of great importance to a country. While arts can benefit people mentally, athletics can do advantages to people physically. Sponsoring Olympic teams helps to make people learn more about a particular sport, plenty opportunities will be offered to people. Sports equipment will be set up in the neighborhood, matches will be held every weekend. Thus people will get more exposure to sports and even get involved. Take Liverpool for example, Liverpool is an England city famous for its football team. Football instantly became a popular sport in the area after the city sponsored the team, which greatly encouraged the citizens to play football. Every people in the city became a fantastic football player due to the investment of the local government.
In addition, the promotion of athletics can not only help the sport team to gain fame but also can let the city be more exposed to the whole world. Investing money in athletics help to build a sense of pride in the citizens. Since sport teams are always the symbol of a city, people will easily think of Rockets when Miami is mentioned. The uniqueness will have a positive effect on building up the sense of belonging to the city. For example, people in Miami loves the Rocket, they are more than happy to see their favorite team wins a game, since therefore not only the basketball team but also the city will also be known by people throughout the world.
To sum up, I find it important to spend abundant money in athletics. Because improving athletics constructions can improve people's physical health and also help to build a sense of pride of the city among the citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 43.0788530466 21% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89908256881 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65025954499 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535168195719 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6478781734 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115112621619 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437488140207 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649405036957 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856602673083 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543004502991 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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