Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I disagree that if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying, due to the following reasons.
First of all, people easily regret, and waiting for a better job instead of taking the secure job right away can reduce the chance of getting regret. Secure jobs usually are not the top priority for people. If they take the secure job offer right away, they have to quit what they want the most and they will regret if they get another better offer later. For example, I applied a lot of internships last summer. A company which is not my favorite one gave me an offer before other companies' interview processes began, and i took the offer right away because I did not have any other offer at that time. Two months later, I regretted because one of my dream companies gave me an offer. I was so frustrated then because I lost the opportunity to get into the company I like more. Therefore, waiting for a job that is more satisfying is the better way for people to avoid having regret.
Also, people like money, and they have a big chance to get higher pay if they wait for a job that is more satisfying rather than take the secure job offer right away. For instance, my brother applied a lot of jobs before gradation. He got his first offer only two weeks after he applied for the job. However, the offer did not have high pay he expected, which made him decide to wait for another job offer coming. After about three months, an offer which was from his favorite company came. Moreover, the pay was much higher than the first one and was even the highest among his friends'. He was so excited because he can have more money to use for his living and expenses. Apparently, waiting for a job which is more satisfying is a better choice because people can get higher pay usually.
In conclusion, if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should wait for a job that would be more satisfying rather than take it right away, so that they can avoid having regret and may have a chance to get higher pay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ompanies interview processes began, and i took the offer right away because I did...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39130434783 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21374077448 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.39641943734 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.515368643 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3888888889 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439814965432 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176248669777 0.076458572812 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173606687154 0.0737576698707 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.415815662703 0.150856017488 276% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147491466189 0.0645574589148 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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