Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Obtain employment one of the most concerning issue in modern society. Some people put forward that if there is an opportunity to get a secure job we should seize the chance instead of waiting for a more satisfying job. However, in my opinion, choosing a job you really like has several advantages over the former. I would express my appreciation for waiting for a satisfying job.
As the society becomes more and more advanced and complicated, the employment pressure increasing. So that many graduated students looking forward to getting a job as soon as they graduated. However, not all the people can find a job they really want even though they have plan for future career, they struggle but finally compromise. It worth noting that once you choose a job this could be your lifelong career because there is few chance to change. Imaging you have to do which against your heart, It just like you marry the one who you don’t love, how painful it is. Take my brother w as example, he majored in art who is free spirit and don’t like to be tied down. He should have became a genuine artist, but he with life. At first he earned a living by sold his work pieces, but few people came to buy one, it was not long before he lived beyond he’s income. My parents find a secure job at my home town for him, said that to be a bank clerk was stable and well-paid. Finally my brother gave up his dream that to be a great artist and open a gallery. Now he have worked as a bank clerk for 10 years, he told me he felt painful but nothing can change once he made his own decision. Some of my brother’s classmates insisted down and devoted their life to art, they really find their ture meaning of life and lead to a satisfied life. So my brother encourage me to pursue what I really want devote my whole life to, the definition of a perfect life is no regret.
What’s more, do what you really good at and love can tap your potential. Everyone born with different genuine and characteristic that is why everyone is unique. Some one born to be a inventor like Einstein, some one born to be a leader like Nelson Mandela. One thing that we should keep in mind that all of us are unique we must look for what we love then follow it. For instance, my PE teacher told me that when she was 14 years old she join in a basketball club but she had no confidence to perform well. But she did a good job then fall in love with playing basketball, then when she was 18 years old she listened to her coach’s opinion and majored in PE. Now she start her career, I am sure this job is really fit her due to her good achievement at PE. Think about what if she choose another major, she may not be inspired her potential.
In conclusion, we should follow our heart find a satisfying job. Good things are worth waiting for.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed, the employment pressure increasing. So that many graduated students looking forward...
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Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
... they really want even though they have plan for future career, they struggle but fi...
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Line 2, column 430, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun chance seems to be countable; consider using: 'few chances'.
Suggestion: few chances
...e your lifelong career because there is few chance to change. Imaging you have to do which...
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Line 2, column 695, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...;t like to be tied down. He should have became a genuine artist, but he with life. At ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... a bank clerk was stable and well-paid. Finally my brother gave up his dream that to be...
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Line 2, column 1079, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...great artist and open a gallery. Now he have worked as a bank clerk for 10 years, he...
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Message: Did you mean 'Someone'?
Suggestion: Someone
...eristic that is why everyone is unique. Some one born to be a inventor like Einstein, so...
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Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...everyone is unique. Some one born to be a inventor like Einstein, some one born t...
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Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...ne born to be a inventor like Einstein, some one born to be a leader like Nelson Mandela...
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Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'joins'.
Suggestion: joins
...d me that when she was 14 years old she join in a basketball club but she had no con...
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Line 3, column 677, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...os;s opinion and majored in PE. Now she start her career, I am sure this job is reall...
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Line 3, column 791, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...ievement at PE. Think about what if she choose another major, she may not be inspired ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3624288425 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44384892189 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504743833017 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5279395765 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1481481481 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5185185185 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241437995856 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731623288684 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642173913331 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173059605863 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636556420776 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.