Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support you answer.

Having a satisfyed job play a vital role in people' feel happiness. Some people believe that take secure job is better rather than wait for job that would be satisfying. However, Other disagree. In my opinion, The more do satisfyied job, The more feel happiness in our life. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

First, satisfying job could help people to be more creative. When you do some duty which is enjoyment for you, therefore, it would help you to be more ingeniuse and creative. One of my friend's experience is a compelling example in this. I have a friend who work for a enginiering firm for couple of years. she has never liked her job discription, while, she was always feel sad and boring. she has consistent day with and never has new idea in her work. This circumstance makes her feel un happy. This example clearly illustrates that unsatisfyed job will be boring thus in a unhappy situation people could not be creative and feel satisfyed.

Second, happiness job could help people to have a better relationship with their family. If you have delightful time with your job assignment, then you would feel better with your family. The more you have delightful time in your work, The better relationship toy make with your family. For instance, I have working in a job situation which I selected it when I understand that I have interested in. I spend most of my daily time in my company with my coworker that are really lovely and a job description which make me happy because I really interested in. therefore, when I come back to my home, I feel much more happiness and with a lot of energy. I can have pleasure time with my family.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that having satisfying job will be better rather than secure job. it is not only could develop your job situation, but also help you to have pleasure time with your family.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61946902655 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59491132733 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463126843658 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3230633483 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.1818181818 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4090909091 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366895599577 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119353130976 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945606772256 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26090259171 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523233968075 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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