Do you agree or disagree with following statement? It is better to make friends with intelligent people than the people who have a good sense of humor.
Living in cosmopolitan cities, people typically acquaint with spread spectrum of people during their daily life. Sometimes, they will become friend depending on their characters and traits. Therefore, the question whether it is better to make friends with intelligent people or people who have a good sense of humor has long been a topic of controversy among students, colleagues and different circles. On the one hand there are people who adhere to the believe that becoming friend with person who has a good sense of humor will bring about delighted time for them; on the other hand, others believe that becoming friend with an intelligent person has outstanding merits. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only can intelligent people aid us in difficult situation but also can they provide more opportunities for us in future.
People usually expect their friends to assist them encountering difficulties. Besides, intelligent people will always come up with excellent ideas to deal with the problems. Then, having intelligent friends provide us several remedies in order to solve the problem. For instance, last year I had a serious problem with my laptop which had made me crazy since I couldn’t find the problem, then, I contacted one of my friend who is very intelligent person and he solved my problem after asking two or three questions. Furthermore, becoming aware of dangerous situations sooner than average-mind people, intelligent people also aid us not to encounter possible difficulties. I remember, I would invest in stock three years ago but my friend convinced me to buy house, after one month the price of house doubled due to inflation. Therefore, if I had invested my money in stock, I would had lost my money. Subsequently, people won’t be able to deal with their difficulties unless they become friend with intelligent people.
Having relationship with intelligent people means more career opportunities. In fact, intelligent people usually are person who can use their skills and talents in more effective way. Therefore, being in contact with such person will help us to learn how to discover our talents and develop our kills and put them into practice. Then, having developed skills will provide more career opportunities leading to earning more money and fulfilling our family’ expectations. Besides, considering them as a competitor will encourage us to become successful as they much are. For example, I had an intelligent classmate who learned lesson very easily, as a result of which I attempted to study hard in order to obtain better GPA. In fact, it helps me to solidify my background which it now really helps to find a decent job. Consequently, provided people become friend with intelligent people, they will become more successful in their future career.
To wrap it up, having intelligent friends, we can overcome our difficulties and become aware of possible dangerous situations. Moreover, it also helps us to become more successful providing more career opportunities. Then, I will become friend with a new person, if he is an intelligent person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...their characters and traits. Therefore, the question whether it is better to make friends with intel...
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Line 1, column 451, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...one hand there are people who adhere to the believe that becoming friend with person who ha...
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Line 1, column 455, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...hand there are people who adhere to the believe that becoming friend with person who ha...
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Line 1, column 865, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... they provide more opportunities for us in future. People usually expect their friends...
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Line 3, column 888, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...had invested my money in stock, I would had lost my money. Subsequently, people won...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2653.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22244094488 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92414153662 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490157480315 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3425190344 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.541666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.79166666667 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343096842601 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115719663639 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107605910148 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228398548697 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108808740451 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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