Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays the ratio of people who decide to move to another country is increasing. I entirely agree with the idea that is far better for young people to choose to leave their hometown and move to another place when they reach adulthood. I believe it for two reasons. In the new country, they have the opportunity to find more and better job opportunities in comparison with the job market of their hometown which is limited. And also, they can start a new life in a big city, where it can provide them with different opportunities for him and his family.
First and foremost, this new generation of people is willing to move out to another country or city due to they looking for better job opportunities which provide them better wages. Is remarkably to say that in their hometown is almost impossible to find this kind of professional opportunities and achieve a high position. For example, it has been shown statistically in recent studies, that the proportion of mobility of young people between 25 and 35 years of age is about 65% of the total of young professionals in a country.
So, there are ground to believe that the average salary in the hometown is low. In this sense, on the whole, the fact to have a better life with a big house, a car and without economic problems is the driving force behind their work hard and the decision to leave their family, friends in their hometown.
Another essential point to consider is that people who become adults are willing to start a new life and raise their family in a great place, especially in a developing country, which has better opportunities in health, education, and transport. For instance, experts claim that the currently trendy of the new generation of people is travel around the world and chose the best place to live, in cities as New York, Belgium, Montreal, and so on. That is because different communities around the world can only offer people essential opportunities. Therefore, it is remarkably the big decision that they must to take just because they want to overcome the poverty in their little towns.
In sum, in spite of some people do not want to hazard their life moving out to another country, other like me aim for an outstanding live in an extraordinary place. Finally, I would propose that parents must share this idea with their children with the intention to encourage them to pursue their dreams in an excellent city with opportunities for the rest of their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 604, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...s remarkably the big decision that they must to take just because they want to overcome...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, so, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of, in spite of, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75700934579 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67051884253 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474299065421 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9330747457 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364981953194 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122396639927 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796458596575 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221313683408 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658752467807 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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