Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to spend your money on an object that will last a long time than it is to spend your money on an experience (such as a vacation, concert, etc.) that will last only a short time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Spending money wisely is one of the most important skills of human being. How to use money effectively is always controversial and it depends much on each person’s decision. Although spending money on buying physical things or on experiencing a course, service, or travelling are both beneficial our lives, I believe most successful people prefer using their money for having experience in life than buying luxury objects. It is because experience benefits us for two main reasons.
First, money spent on experience can create memory which could last forever. It is essential to have special time such as traveling or enjoying a concert for every individual. In addition, traveling can create good time which we can spare with our family members, friends, and lovers. For example, I had an incredibly memorable trip with my foreign friends when we were studying at graduate school. We went on road trip discovering new place, eating together, and singing together. We knew each other better through the trip. Our relationship was tighter after the trip, which accelerate our team work in many courses of our graduate study. In addition, it is extremely difficult to gather all of us at the same time for a trip due to our available time for now after we all graduate. I am glad that I did not miss a chance. I have no regret when I spent money for the trip with them.
Second, experience help us learn new things and skills which are meaning and essential for our lives. In other word, experience generates benefit now and in the future. We can use money to register for a class or attend a conference which could expand our knowledge profoundly. These experience are valuable and would be very useful for us in the future. In a summer vacation during my study time at graduate school, I attended various courses on research methodology and modelling insteading of buying shoes or expensive watch. I learned a lot through the courses and applied these information to my thesis, which made my graduate thesis becomes easier and more practical. Moreover, I had a chance to meet many friends who have the same interest. These friends turn to my customer and partner in business currently. I gain a lot from those courses in term of both knowledge and social network.
In sum, money should be spent in things and experience in a balance way and a portion that is suitable for each of us. However, I prefer spending money on experience which generate a vast of benefits in current time and in the future. We should all consider to spend money more on experiencing things and leaning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[4]
Message: The verb mean is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...lp us learn new things and skills which are meaning and essential for our lives. In other w...
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...lp us learn new things and skills which are meaning and essential for our lives. In other w...
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Line 5, column 578, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...d a lot through the courses and applied these information to my thesis, which made my graduate th...
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Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider spending'.
Suggestion: consider spending
...t time and in the future. We should all consider to spend money more on experiencing things and l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84459459459 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68524674418 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511261261261 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2101819307 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7307692308 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0769230769 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88461538462 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178870065458 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520759496645 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046571872332 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125942792088 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045880279526 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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