No one can deny the fact that during their lifetime, human beings go through certain stages of life phases and one of them is the elderly stage. On that ground, when people enter the elderly phase, they need to meticulously choose their decisions and priorities. In this regard, some people contend that it is not judicious to attempt risky things during this age. On the other hand, there is a group of people who consider it as an exaggeration, and apparently, hold the opposite viewpoint. From my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that old age people are not physically strong. In such scenarios, if they expose to any kind of physical injuries, they might not recover from their physical damage as at this age damaged cells would take a long time to be repaired, or sometimes they are damaged permanently. On the contrary, this is not true for adults as their physical recovery does not take much time, and thereby, they can think of doing risky tasks. drawing from my uncle’s example to shed light on what has been elaborated above. Ten years back, when my uncle, George turned 65, has decided to go mountaineering. Unfortunately, he met with an accident while climbing a snow peak and was paralyzed for a lifetime because his blood pressure did not recover immediately. Ultimately, it is reasonable to say, had my uncle avoided going climbing, he would not have faced lifelong physical impairment.
Another noteworthy point to be considered here is that it is true that most elders are financially and physically dependent on their children. In fact, they cannot face the huge financial burden at this age. Therefore, it is not reasonable to invite unnecessary expenses if they face physical injuries while exploring new things. In contrast, most adults are provided with health insurance coverage from workplaces. Hence, even if they meet with any injuries, they do not have to pay a single penny from their pocket. For instance, as I mentioned earlier, having a paralyzed body, my uncle must have had to take physiotherapy treatment every day for the last ten years. On top of them, due to his permanent physical damage, his body does not allow him to work outside at home that increases the financial burden on his elder son. Hence, it is merely to say, it is crucial for elders to choose their activities by considering their physical health.
All in all, by contemplating all remarks, I strongly believe that elders should avoid taking risks. This is because they are physically not strong, and they cannot accept huge monetary burdens at this age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Drawing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, hence, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in contrast, in fact, kind of, it is true, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93088552916 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68271407041 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557235421166 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2389152598 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2608695652 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1304347826 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21739130435 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114396825206 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0350504636344 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330388903023 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069776961216 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333841705617 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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