Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to have information concerning events which do not affect you directly.
Even though a vast majority of people deem that acquiring information concerning the events happening in other countries is not substantial, there are still some people who contradict this opinion. From my perspective, knowing what happens in other countries is exceedingly important, and I uphold this idea for three core reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay in depth.
First and foremost, attaining information regarding events abroad enhances your outlook. For instance, if you are watching news about USA, you will get acquainted with recent activities there, so if you will pay a visit to U.S you will not struggle much; moreover, based on my own subjective experience, this information will not only be supportive in terms of traveling, but it also helps you to succeed in some conferences. Last time I attended MUN, and I was representing USA, and frankly, the knowledge I obtained from TV news, were overly beneficial for me. Furthermore, my cousin also encountered a myriad of advantages of the events happening in other countries, and one them is about the university application. While writing an essay for university, my cousin accentuated some information he has regarding both university and country, which he gained from news, so university appreciated his knowledge and outlook, and immediately accepted him. Consequently, knowing what happens in the world has an array of benefits.
Secondly, learning about the events also helps you to suppress the problems you will face in the future. For example, last time I noticed a news about how people in China deal with earthquakes, and how they sidestep detrimental problems that earthquakes cause. After two month there was an severe earthquake in Azerbaijan, and dozens of people passed away, yet nothing happened to my family due to the precious information I got from TV. When I evoked the things Chinese people conducted, I instantly implemented, and to this end, nothing happened to us. As it may be inferred from my experience, the knowledge people consider trifling saved the life of my family, which is more fundamental than anything.
In conclusion, I would like to assert that thinking narrowly leads to numerous problems. People assume that events which do not affect them directly are not crucial, but as it is evident from the experiences I have listed, sometimes that “ unimportant” information may save our lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
... there, so if you will pay a visit to U.S you will not struggle much; moreover, b...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...uture. For example, last time I noticed a news about how people in China deal with ear...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...blems that earthquakes cause. After two month there was an severe earthquake in Azerb...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...quakes cause. After two month there was an severe earthquake in Azerbaijan, and do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, frankly, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21282051282 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00930072629 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5854319868 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.533333333 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203719339079 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058012647476 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641774717235 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119322522606 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334685325859 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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