Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is goes without saying that in this progressive world, where we live, there are a lot of different events happening every moment. There has been a controversial debate among people living in the resent time as to whether it is beneficial if we be informed of different events. From my perspective, having a good knowledge and information about events happening in this world is so helpful, and two reasons to support my view are presented as follows.
To begin with, having more information about happenings occurring in every corner of the globe, we will turn into more knowledgeable individuals. It is not a secret to anyone that in today's world science and knowledge are the most important factor of humans' life and they are trying to be considered as literate people to have a better status in their societies. When be informed of a lot of different stories and events occurring in this world, we will have great deal of information about various subjects which is significantly helpful to be known as knowledgeable individuals. This knowledge helps us to broaden our horizon. Not only will we turn into literate people, we will also have an opportunity to boost the way of thinking about the world and other nations. To put it in more vivid picture, my father, who is really interested in watching and listening to the news every day from countless channels, have an extensive information about all countries and every time we ask a question about other cultures and countries, he reply our questions immediately since have a great knowledge. if my father did not watch or listen to the news every moment, he would not be able to answer such difficult questions about other countries.
Furthermore, in this way, being aware of a huge number of events occurring in this planet, we definitely have a chance to be useful people during the living. It is crystal clear that there are so many sad stories and happenings about humans and we are able to pursue this kind of detrimental happening until we find a way to stop them. Having a sense of altruism, we will put the most of our efforts to make things right meaning we help this world to be a better and peaceful place for living. For instance, when I found out that in Palestine was the slaughter of children, I felt that I could help those children having killed every day by supporting them in social media which is a best way to be in touch with other liberal people. Had I not been informed of such situation for kids, I would not have supported them in the right time.
In sum, not only will people be able to acquire enormous valuable information, they will also have a chance to feel useful and help this planet to be a better place for everyone with every identity
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... among people living in the resent time as to whether it is beneficial if we be informed of d...
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Line 3, column 1035, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'replies'.
Suggestion: replies
... about other cultures and countries, he reply our questions immediately since have a ...
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Line 3, column 1078, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'great knowledge'.
Suggestion: great knowledge
...ly our questions immediately since have a great knowledge. if my father did not watch or listen t...
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Line 3, column 1097, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...mediately since have a great knowledge. if my father did not watch or listen to th...
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Line 5, column 683, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...upporting them in social media which is a best way to be in touch with other libe...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, really, so, as to, for instance, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67701863354 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6656955911 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463768115942 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.4721010053 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.1875 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13160689683 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054929663788 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341908374645 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949238103421 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165978406429 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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