Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Ability of acquiring information has been more and more emphasized, nowadays a discussion over whether people should learn about universal news that irrelevant with their routine has been triggered. In my opinion, such events can be regarded as conversation contents with people to activate atmosphere and can be vital for people living in foreign lands where news happen.
What should be prioritized is that people can have more topics to communicate if they learn about such unnecessary news. To be more specific, people are always interested in strange fields, especially for those stressful working adults who like talking about unfamiliar events that can help them escape from their tiring routine. For instance, several months ago there was an event that a spacecraft was launched towards the Mars by Tesla. This piece of news has nothing to do with my parents who are both Chinese teachers, however, they have kept talking about this issue for weeks during our dinner. They talked about possibility of human beings living in other planets in the future, and their imagination about travelling through nebulas and galaxies was so romantic that can helped them forget about their daily life for seconds, refreshing them to meet future challenges.
Meanwhile, the spread of information of foreign countries can be extremely significant for people living in there. Many countries use newspaper to show their difficulties and ask people from other countries for help. As we know that there are many people in Africa are impoverished and disadvantaged, millions of them are dying from some curable diseases. What they can do is to expose their dilemma to international people and ask for their help. If more people realize their life could be save by donating little money buying vaccines that have been developed already, more lives could be saved. Learning information that has no relation ship with us can be vital for others.
In conclusion, international news should also be emphasized, because they can both increase the topic of relaxing conversation and might be vital for people in their future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, then, while, for instance, in conclusion, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17796610169 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65545888771 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576271186441 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0359230765 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.928571429 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114095179324 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432091441902 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257702422607 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699130231723 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345128814655 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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