Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The ability of acquiring information has been more and more emphasized, and nowadays a discussion over whether people should learn about world news that are irrelevant to their daily lives has been triggered. In my opinion, such events enable people to relieve pressures and can be vital for people living in foreign lands where news happen.
Firstly, things happening around the world can help people boost new ideas and produce more thinking space. This kind of phenomenon has been proved by a newest report from Peking University, people’s brain nerves tend to become more activated when people are reading novelties, just like when people are having some relaxing fantasies. To be more specific, reading such an information can help people escape from their stressful life and make them relax. For instance, several months ago a spacecraft was launched towards the Mars by Tesla. This piece of news had nothing to do with my parents who are both Mandarin teachers. However, they have kept talking about this issue for weeks during our meals. They talked about possibility of human beings living in other planets in the future, and their imagination about travelling through nebulas and galaxies was so romantic that it helped them forget about their daily life for seconds. Their fantasies are based on unknown territories, which can relax themselves.
Meanwhile, the spread of information of oversea countries can be extremely significant for the well-being that people hope for. From United Nations' statistics, there are about thirty countries cannot afford to broadcast their information to external world, and all of them are suffering from poverty and diseases. What they can do is to expose their troubles to people around the world, which could cost the local government one to two years of savings. If the information has been successfully delivered, their lives would be saved, if failed, things would be worse. For example, there are many people in Africa that are impoverished and disadvantaged, millions of them are dying from some curable illnesses. If their circumstances can be propagated effectively, more people would realize their difficulties and more money could be raised to buy some developed vaccines to save their lives. For people from those countries, the delivery of such a piece of news represents invaluable survival hope for them.
Inconclusion, people should also pay more attentions to international news, because that news can help people relieve pressures and can be vital for people living in undeveloped countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...s kind of phenomenon has been proved by a newest report from Peking University, p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28921568627 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67910432077 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551470588235 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5590432256 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.888888889 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.071356808899 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296544852297 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341885597448 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0479911723347 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343350770295 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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