Your school wants to improve the quality of students’ life in dormitory. Which of the following do you think the school should build in dorms?
1. quiet study area
2. exercise room for students to keep physically well-being
3. room for entertainment
Every student wants to enjoy a wonderful well-being, and many schools try to attract more students by improving their dormitory circumstances. Nowadays a discussion over building what kind of areas can promote students’ dormitory experience has been triggered. In my opinion, the construction of a quiet study room can be the best option.
Firstly, a study area inside the students’ apartment can be extremely convenient when meeting bad weather. In most of schools, students have to go to library or classrooms to self-study. If there is a rain or snow, they can only rush into those rooms with their wet clothes and muddy shoes even if they had an umbrella, which always ruins the quiet studying atmosphere of study rooms and students’ emotion can be negatively influenced. According to a survey conducted by Tsinghua University, more than eight percent of students could not focus on their books if they got caught in the rain. So if there is a quiet study room inside students dormitory, students can step into the room without being affected by external weathers, their clothes would be tidy and their attentions could be paid totally on their subjects. For instance, what I longed for during my university is a study room in our apartment, because I cared about my appearance so much that I could not study if there was a stain in my clothes. Every time there was rain, it cost me hours to dry out my jacket and shine my shoes, after which I have no energy to focus on my study anymore. That is why I believe a study room can help lot for students.
Meanwhile, students can save up much time if they can study in their dormitories. This statement can be especially suitable for university students whose school is very large and has many students. It always takes students who want to study more than fifteen minutes to arrive their libraries or classrooms, this is not the end. Students need to find an empty seat in library and a self-studying classroom, after searching for every floor of their every buildings and library, it is possible that students cannot find a suitable place for them to study. They can neither tell which classroom has been reserved by following lessons later, nor can they find an empty table in the library. After spending hours, students have to go back to their dormitories. According to the newest report from Beijing University of Construction, there are more than half universities that do not contain enough study rooms for their students. So a study room inside the dormitory means a lot for students, because they can go to that area without spending hours searching for suitable places.
In conclusion, a quiet study room can be the most helpful for students’ life qualities, especially when they meet bad weathers and have to spend much time finding studying seats.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the schools') or simply say ''most schools''.
Suggestion: most of the schools; most schools
...convenient when meeting bad weather. In most of schools, students have to go to library or clas...
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Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...o if there is a quiet study room inside students dormitory, students can step into the r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88075313808 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70380716199 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481171548117 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7506046478 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.65 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344504963338 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124277141099 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591033773057 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25439586893 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345039428487 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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