Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, people are inclined to diverse jobs with different working time, perks, salary, and duties according to their personality, age, and traditions socially acceptable in their countries. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among people about how many workdays are proper for an individual. While some people prefer fewer days, specially three days, with longer hours, others believe otherwise-that is- five days a week with shorter hours. I personally, concur with the latter. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, the more working hours people works, the more tiredness and weariness they will become. People who work for long hours a day are less productive and energetic at their job. It is scientifically proven that the function of the brain dramatically decreases after a few hours of constant work. People who work for a long time a day are susceptible to disastrous mistakes in their tasks which cannot be compensated, so Losing perks, bonuses, high salary or even getting fired occur as result of boss's dissatisfaction. This clearly demonstrates that working for shorter hours a day could increase the efficiency of employees.
The second point is that fewer workdays make people lazy. In spite of the fact that fewer workdays provide more free time for employees to do other activities such as doing sports, playing music, and going to the cinema, to name but a handful, it causes sluggishness that inhibit people from doing regular activities. In other words, because they are not obligated to go to work every morning, the thought of having tons of time prevent them to get up early in the morning, so they cannot make the most of their time. However, in the workdays, they are energetic that they can take part in enjoyable activities after their work. In this regard, there is a renowned proverb which states, "The early bird catches the worm," which emphasizes the role of getting up early in order to thrive.
Last but not least, staying at home for more than two days in a week, can affects people's mood negatively. Although working three days a week brings about more time for individuals to spend on their interests, it can adversely affect their temper. Constant contact with family often causes squabbling over unimportant things, so the pleasure of life will become bitter and people become bad-tempered. For example, I stay at home on weekends. I have a great mood in the first day of my holidays because I can do whatever I want; I do a lot of sport, I go to restaurant with my friends, I watch my favorite film. In the second day, I become bored and tired because life loses its meaning and I do not have any achievement for my life. In this situation, I may argue with my family about negligible things and annoy my parent. Therefore, having extreme free time causes losing motivation and offense.
All in all, I really believe that the advantages working five days outweigh the advantages of working three days. This is because fewer workdays causes negative influence on one's function, laziness, and probable problems with family members. People who go to work a fewer workdays not only have more efficiency at their job, but they also have better a schedule and behavior in their private life. Hence, should companies pass the law of working five days a week with shorter hours, their employee's performance will improve and they will have more discipline in their private life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, while, for example, such as, by and large, in other words, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2918.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 589.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95415959253 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66110929975 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494057724958 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 899.1 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2582805247 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.074074074 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8148148148 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304576140838 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889754741991 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642449624871 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187263299353 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606905787064 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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