A glance at people’s attitude toward the hours of working brings to the light a question that has been asked several times, namely, whether working for longer hours but three days a week is better choice or working shorter hours and five days a week. As a pharmacist who is married, my preference is to work five days a week for eight hours instead of staying at pharmacy for 12 continuous hours. Although some of my colleagues choose to distribute prescriptions the whole day and have long weekends, I do not see their schedule reasonable for myself because most of them are singles and far away from their relatives.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lied in the fact that I am a mother with difficult responsibilities about my daughter. A study at Harvard University, department of child psychology, shows that babies need significant attention and love during first two years of their life. It can affect their life later when they enter to society. If parents do not give them enough love and care, they cannot trust people and will not have self-confidence. The results of this study are tangible for me because I experienced that if my daughter does not see me longer than specific hours, she becomes sick. Therefore, not only is it crucial for me to be an excellent pharmacist, but also to be a caring mother.
Another subtle point that I should deem is the fact that in healthcare, people must be really careful. Even a small mistake can threaten patients’ life. In other words, when our mind is tired, it cannot focus well and makes more mistakes than normal which is dangerous for people. Medicines look similar and I noticed that after noon, pharmacy technicians bring the wrong medicine which is sometimes life-threatening. Thus, I think it is better to choose safer side and work less every day but without error.
Nevertheless, single pharmacists state that longer hours work better. They spend their time and money on traveling, since they have no family to be with. However, even if I had long holiday, I still could not go to journey. It is obvious for parents that with a toddler it is impossible to rest and must go around the entire time during trip.
Due to the aforementioned argument discussed in the previous statements, I highly recommend my married colleagues to have shorter schedules for five days a week, even though singles may choose different plan.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: OBVIOUS_FOR[1]
Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to parents'.
Suggestion: obvious to parents
... I still could not go to journey. It is obvious for parents that with a toddler it is impossible to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, i think, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81884057971 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74590090158 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586956521739 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7242884455 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290970453765 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745041019558 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860330648368 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155551289133 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109765193489 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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