Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is of no denial that for now, the internet access and the public transportation are both important and also indispensible to society. While some may consider it's more important to improve public transportation systems, I believe it's better to spend money improving internet access. In the following passages, I will clearly illustrate my reasons.
Frankly speaking, people are using electronic devices all the time, thus the demand for internet access should be answered. There have already been a lot of stores and cafes that's equipped with Wi-Fi. It is no surprise that people will prefer places with easy internet access than none. This also reflect the need for internet is large, and the government should keep up the pace with modern society to help extend the internet access in different areas. For example, the government should consider putting mobile wi-fi devise of each cage of the train. In this way, even when the train is going through the tunnel, people inside could continue their work. If the government can face the demand of the public, they should receive a lot of positive feedback.
Next, improving internet access can help people catch up the news and events quickly. For some students, they may only have a cell-phone to contact their parents, which is without internet access. If the government can put their money into improving internet, then the students will be able to know the events happening around the world in no time. Imagine how much they will gain from all the in-time news events. And even if they use the internet to download games or something, it is also a way for them to release their stress. In both situation, the students benefits a lot from this improvement.
Admittedly, some may still insist that public transportation should be improved first. As far as I am concern, I disagree with this opinion. Since the transportation in my country has already been good enough, I do not think it is a huge concern. As the high-speed rail road building, the distant between places just become shorter and shorter. In a result, I do not support the idea that money should be spent on transportation.
In conclusion, I believe that it's more important for the government to improve internet access because the demands for it is huge, and the students will benefit from it. Also, since the transportation is already excellent in my country, the best choice is to put money into improving internet access.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... already been a lot of stores and cafes thats equipped with Wi-Fi. It is no surprise ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, frankly, if, may, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94915254237 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65884481735 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501210653753 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8546052631 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9090909091 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7727272727 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346536853932 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976716022018 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747320493352 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213383166564 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737931066962 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.