Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
The internet and the transportation are the significant matters of any country, and should be improved in a certain amount. Personally, I believe that authorities of country need to expend more funding for public transportation. I feel this way for three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, nowadays, traffic jam is the major concern of many countries, especially developing nations such as Mongolia, my native country. The more impoverished the public servise is, the more people utilize their own belongings, car. Therefore, the highways will be crowded if many people drive their own vehicle. People will probably expend enormous amount of time only by standing on the bus in light of congestion on the road, if the transportation is not well funded by the regime. On the other hand, poor developed networking system will not occasion ample problems. To be more specific, networking system and bus are equally less developed in the city where I live. Hence, I expend almost three hours per day on the bus. However, I solve the problem associated with internet access without losing my opportunity to develop myself by reading books. Drawing from my own experience, the biggest hindrance of my life is the congestion on the highway because of the impoverished transportation system but not virtual communication system. In conclusion, citizens chance to continuing their life successfully is heavily related to the transportation.
Secondly, there are several things such as phone call, handouts and meeting in person which are capable of substituting internet access adequately. Nonetheless, it is arduous to find matters which can play the role of transportation unless individuals are able to drive the vehicle. For this reason, transportation is essential matter for people's daily life. For instance, my friend lives in the outskirts where the public bus system is accessible but internet is remote. He is dealing everything correctly, and managing the lesson thanks to the easy reach to the downtown without even the internet. If the situation had been vice versa, or he had access to the internet but transportation, he would have stay the suburb area without attending classes, and only complain about the downsides.
In summation, I am of the opinion of the government must increase the quality of transporting system more sufficiently than virtual technology. This is because traffic jam caused by the inadequate public service will reduce the amount of time that people spend for necessary things, and the internet can be substituted with other things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 706, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'staid', 'stayed'.
Suggestion: staid; stayed
...ernet but transportation, he would have stay the suburb area without attending class...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27446300716 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01297123823 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546539379475 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9039841988 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.238095238 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214139939808 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592015776893 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492369210073 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143557015003 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395492270099 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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