Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays our society has high demand for a good quality of life. It is thought by some people that the government should spent more money to improve internet access rather than public transportation. However, in my view, public transportation is very important for people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is essential for people to have good transportation system, which would ease their every day lives. Many people depend on public transportation to go to work or do other things. If the public transportation is updated according to people's needs, then that would realy benefits them in any aspect of their daily activities. On the other hand, if this system has a lack of maintenance or is old, that would cause a lot of problems such as delays and people's frustration. My experience as a person who use public transportation every day, is a compelling example of this. Five years ago, I got a job located in a remote area. I did not own a car at that time, so I was very dependent on the only bus that passed through that area. Many times I was late at work because the bus was very old and needed frequent repair. That delay impacted my reputation at work, my co-workers thought that I was doing that in purpose. Even though I tried to explain, no body would trust me. Because of this experience, I really think that the government should invest in all public transportations and make it affordable and Convenient for people to fulfill their needs.
Secondly, It is important to consider the fact that a new and advanced public transportation would reduce the air pollution in our environment. People all over the world are experiencing medical conditions just because the level of air pollution is significantly increased in the past few decades. If the government take take the improvement of transportation seriously, that would have a huge impact on the peoples health. For example, statistics have revealed that 89 percent of people who had respiratory conditions have had a huge improvement on their health, after the local authorities invested in public transportation. The level of air pollution dropped by 46 percent. According to this, the government should improve transportation system. Therefore, people would have a better health.
In conclusion, I believe that transportation system should be improved because that would ease people's lives and reduce air pollution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: people
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...aly benefits them in any aspect of their daily activities. On the other hand, if ...
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Message: Did you mean 'nobody'?
Suggestion: nobody
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: take
...the past few decades. If the government take take the improvement of transportation serio...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00487804878 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04188488484 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519512195122 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7079146475 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2173913043 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212335222974 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655597864018 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069104867511 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146288994859 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752876694366 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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