Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Attending the university is crucial for students development in academic level. It is thought by some people that colleges should equally invest in sports activities and libraries. However, in my view, universities should consider investing more in libraries rather than sports. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explore in following paragraphs.
To begin with, without a doubt universities should take into account the fact that libraries are the most essential part of the university itself. Students get their study materials from the libraries, which help them to save money because they do not have to pay for the books. After they finish with the book, they have to return the books back as the requirement of the library. In addition, students who could not afford to purchase books, libraries would offer them a full access to the academic materials that they would need. For instance, my experience as a student is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, when I was in university, my budget was tight and I could not afford to buy all the books that I needed for each semester. Since university allowed all students to use the books from library, I was able to use the books that I needed to complete my classes. If the university did not have a rich and advanced library, I would not have been completed my academic studies. That is why colleges should invest more in libraries.
Secondly, contrary to the belief that universities should give equal financial support to sports and libraries, evidence has shown that colleges with a well-established library have better reputation than the libraries that lack of books and academic books. For example, statistics have shown that 95 percent of students who studied at those universities that have provided their students with a full access to their libraries. These young learner, have thrived throughout their academic year. Overall, a rich library, would give students the opportunity to perform well and have access to their study materials any time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that universities should invest more in improving libraries. This is because having good libraries would help students to save money and because would give young learners opportunity to thrive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'full access'.
Suggestion: full access
...chase books, libraries would offer them a full access to the academic materials that they wou...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ges with a well-established library have better reputation than the libraries tha...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'full access'.
Suggestion: full access
... that have provided their students with a full access to their libraries. These young learner...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10483870968 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72929168929 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481182795699 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4873882859 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9473684211 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164988056238 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588529131251 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593048383262 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110859543151 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434415880435 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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