Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Budget allocation priorities have been always a key factor for a successful government and no one can cast doubt on this fact. The controversial question which arises here is whether, spending money on improving Internet access is more important than allocation on public transportation's improvement. I believe that in the modern era accessing to a good Internet system is more beneficial. To support this, there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly explored in the followig.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, technology is progressing on an exponential speed, which means that a lot of tasks are shifting toward the way in which they can be get done online. Needless to say, nowadays, moving with this wave, as well as staying productive in that, only with having a developed Internet access is achievable. For example, most of elections for choosing the best player of a soccer champion hold online. People should use the Internet to access the website and vote to their favorite player. As a result, if people in a country do not access to the Internet as well as others, they can not support their player to become well-known in the world scale.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, nowadays, by developing of technoloty, people can do their tasks online. For example, they can buy all the matter they need, they can do their bank transactions and also their class and meeting can be holded online. So, by having the improvement Internet access they do not need publict transportation to go to shop centers and banks, they can stay at their home and do all tasks faster without any concern of time when they get stuck in traffics. It goes without saying that spending money on improvement of Internet access brings about unnessecity in public transportation.
In short, all thee aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that for a government is it more improtant to pay painstaking attention and allocate more money to improve the Internet access. The fact that all events in the world required the accessibility to internet to stay productive in the world, coupled with that having developed Internet services reduce the use of public transportation, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'transportations'' or 'transportation's'?
Suggestion: transportations'; transportation's
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Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the elections') or simply say ''most elections''.
Suggestion: most of the elections; most elections
...rnet access is achievable. For example, most of elections for choosing the best player of a socce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, then, well, for example, in short, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97416020672 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85268743201 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509043927649 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.254286716 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.333333333 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293861210682 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113324596017 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851524277813 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201127520279 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620047451446 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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