Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for the government to provide money for things that are beautiful than things that are practical | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for the government to provide money for things that are beautiful than things that are practical.

Spending budget by governments has been one of the most hotly-debated topics among people, elders or youngsters. Opinions are divided on whether and to what extent the question, governments should devote more money to practical things or on beautiful ones. Personally, it is my confirmed opinion that practical things should be provided with more money by governments. I will stand my point of view for two concrete reasons which have been stated in the following lines.
The first worthwhile reason should be pinpointed is that Practical projects through providing opportunities serve both society and governments for a long time. To be more specific, practical projects not only provide a plethora number job-opportunity but also is a source of making money for governments that after a while depending on the amount of budget has been spent, spent money could be turned back. The entertainment park, constructed two years before now is a compelling example to clarify this. Due to the new entertainment park, many young jobless men and women from around communities found a job which abled them making their livings. Furthermore, last week the government declared that they could have turned back all the amount of money they had spent on constructing the entertainment park. Controversy, via constructing beautiful things such as installing beautification lights in somewhere these positive result ere not achievable. As a result, governments should devote more budget to practical things because of their benefits for both society and the government.
The second remarkable reason worth mentioning is that providing more money for practical things is a way of protecting the endangered environment where human beings are living in. In the other words, practical things are potentially capable of improving human-made places where are hurting the environment leading to conserving the environment that our lives depend on it. My own experience is an apt illustration of this. Last year, the mayor of my hometown decided to make the main road in the city wider that the main road transformed from a place of heavy traffic jams that was the major cause of air pollution in the city, to a place of steal bustling but running traffic. Moreover, its landscape because of planted trees and flowers had improved as well since before there was no available space for implementing green space along the main road. Whereas, through beautiful things like establishing a sculpture none of these were accessible. Therefore, never had the main road become wider as a practical, the problem of air pollution as one of the most dangerous factors to the environment would have not been solved.
To wrap up what has been discussed, I strongly reinforced that governments should devote more money to practical things rather than beautiful ones because practical things serve not only society but governments. Besides, practical things are more effective in protecting the environment where we are living for thousands of years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 852, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...enting green space along the main road. Whereas, through beautiful things like establis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2535.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27027027027 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93520932326 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52182952183 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3512661211 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.05 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35632981331 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112778223187 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978118238792 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252506392356 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772056570266 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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