Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation Use specific reasons and example to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.

Use specific reasons and example to support your answer.

The government has the responsibility of making the most out of the money they possess. They should always consider the beneficial effect of a policy and choose the one that can benefit most people. Keeping this in mind, when the government should choose between spending money on improving Internet access and improving public transporation, I believe the latter is the apropos choice. The reason to why I perceive this way will be elaborated in more detail below.
First of all, improving Internet access provides various underrepresented people an opportunity to achieve equal level of knowledge. For some people, going to school and receiving proper education might seem like fantasy. As an example, parents who achieve severly low income may not even be able to afford public schools for their children. If so, these children would lack of proper education, and would be unable to make reasonable decisions and wanting in proper skills to get a high income job. They would eventually choose to take high risks to earn money such as selling drugs illegally, which can cause greater problems to the society. However, thanks to technological advancement, there are multiple online education platforms where children can receive equal level of education without any expense. There are even platforms such as Coursera where people can achieve academic degrees with only a few dollars. if they have access to the Internet, they would be able to access to such platforms and hone proper skills to become a beneficial member to the society.
Furthermore, improving Internet access would allow people to improve their social skills. Being able to collaborate is mandatory when it comes to doing projects such as building a robot. To effectively collaborate, people should be well acknowledged in communicating with various people. However, people nowadays tend to spend more time indoors by themselves because of electronic devices such as television and computer. They are gradually losing the ability to socialize with one another. However, having access to the Internet would enable people to use social network platforms such as Twitter and Facebook, allowing them to constantly interact with other people anytime and anywhere they want, which can help them to improve their social skills.
To sum up, improving Internet access would allow equal level of education for underrepresented people such as children who are living in a low income family, and enables people to hone their social skills through social network platforms. Due to such reasons, I believe it is more germane to choose spending money on improving Internet access, rather than on improving public transportation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 918, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ademic degrees with only a few dollars. if they have access to the Internet, they ...
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Line 4, column 300, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to spend'.
Suggestion: to spend
... I believe it is more germane to choose spending money on improving Internet access, rat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30516431925 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76204409204 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50234741784 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6548084278 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224647100887 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764773602932 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807334117658 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165834606301 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053905068203 0.0645574589148 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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