Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the twentieth century, advanced technology and the transportation are playing a crucial role, because they are important for the nation to trade around the globe. Since both are playing parallel role in development there has been no shortage of debate about their significance. However, the question is which one has high priority; transportation or internet. Some people believe technology: such as internet should get primary importance. On the other hand, I personally believe even though internet is important, government should support transportation first for reason I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, transportation is a basic requirement for every citizen of the society. Some people use public transportation like a bus, train and flight to travel various places for a variety of purpose; such as business trips, tours, and children to go the school. On the top of that, we use it for commercial purpose like shipping the goods. In contrast, if we don’t have an efficient transport system, it impact on the whole nation. My friend Ram is the best example of this; he use to do commercial business import and export of the goods like children milk products from Findlay to Omak. First, he was really come across the hard time in the shipping of the products because of the bad roads it took a while to deliver the items. In addition to that, some of the milk products got spoiled because of the delivery delay. In contrast, the next year the government release the fund to built new roads, as a result, no traffic and he stated to get his products on time. What more, he got profit in his business. This example clearly illustrates the importance of the transportation to the society.
In addition to that, transportation improves the government economy, because it attract the more international traders. If we don’t have good hospitalization, if didn’t feel comfort to stay. Same way, if the transportation system is inconvenience to the foreign trader; they might not show interest to do business because lack of convenient route. For example, the United states of America doing trade with neighbor country Canada. They import pharmaceutical and cosmetic products. As a result they are paying taxes to the concern department. What more, the government get benefitting and improving the country economy. I couldn’t image this situation with bad transportation.
In conclusion, although the internet is important to do things fast, overall government should support transportation. The best transportation open up the international market and fulfill the daily requirement of the general public and small business people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, on the whole, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24708624709 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10669533481 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6615682998 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.04 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.16 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212809183049 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571080590144 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532744445177 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131768616638 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225529705402 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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