Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to make friends with people who can have fun with us than to make friends with people who can help us when we are in need.
Friends, in some ways, determine what kind of life we live and thus we choose them carefully. Since friends have different types, people naturally try to distinguish good ones from the bad. Some people claim that it offers more advantages to make friends with people who can have fun with them than with people who can help them when they are in need. However, my attitude is just the opposite of such statement. I believe that no one is more important and valuable than those who can help.
Making friends with people who can have fun with us is not always necessary or beneficial. Having fun is indeed an indispensable part of life, yet we do not always need friends to do so. When the timing is right, we can have fun with anyone without making friends with them. It is just like that we dance with strangers on a square when celebrating the national day, or that we have an interesting chat with the driver while taking a taxi. Such things happen frequently, but these people do not necessarily become our friends. What is more, even if such people become our friends, they would not act as important ones if the only thing we do together is having fun. Staying with fun friends too much can easily distract our attention from things that we are supposed to focus on, which means a waste of time and letting opportunities slip. People with so many tasks to deal with every day seldom need or think of their fun friends.
On the contrary, friends who can help us when we are in need not only benefit our life but even change it in an unexpected positive way. Getting support from others always brings us a sense of security and makes us feel safe no matter what difficulty we encounter. Making friends with such people means comfort, protection, and sometimes, even privileges. That is why many of us consider making some local friends the most urgent mission that we need to accomplish after moving to a new city or a new country. In addition, some people not only help us when we ask for assistance but even remind us of what we need or lack without being required to. These people can be our saviors as well as mentors, for they can even prevent us from being too proud of ourselves and making terrible mistakes. To me, my parents are such kind of friends and they give me advice even if they know that I may not like it. Thanks to them, I have achieved accomplishments better than most people expected.
Friends might be the most influential people in our lives. They are like teachers, supporters and reminders. Although we can also have fun with them, we still know quite clearly that this is not why we value them so much.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, kind of, as well as, on the contrary, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53138075314 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3711559545 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470711297071 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6673677814 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.25 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.606916884667 0.236089414692 257% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189764155292 0.076458572812 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161209694897 0.0737576698707 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.407681005362 0.150856017488 270% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131132691267 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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