Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to have rules about the type of clothing that people wear at schools or in their workplace.
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of education and its necessities in the modern life. without a stunning plan for their education process, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of students that they find a proper job after the graduation. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that sooner graduating would increase our chance in life, while others take issue with this point of view. Notwithstanding differences, I think that the former idea takes priority over another option. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by graduating sooner, people can accumulate more experiences by working in different real situations. To more elaborate, experience provides you golden opportunities to people to become familiar with certain skills or a particular field of the area after actual practice for a period, resulting in great mastery and understanding. Experience can allow you to have good management over difficulties in your life, because you have dealt with some relevant situations in the past, have communicated with some experts and experienced people in the past, and have a wider perspective over various conditions. Experience can give you an insight into the economy and what ideas should be followed and developed by the group, thus increasing the possibility of survival and prosperity in the future. to get the details of this, my own story is a good example of this. Graduating after nearly 5 years of study in the university, I was looking for a job to cover my basic expenses in two years ago. After about ten months looking for a job in different places, I could not find any job, and also I could find out that experience is one of the most precious requirements of getting accepted in companies. In contrast, some of my friends, graduating nearly one year before me, could have found their dream job, because they had worked in a company for about one year for free.
Secondly, based on my observations I have made recently, money is so important in life that almost nothing else can substitute it. Money is the basic requirement for life without which one can not imagine a healthy and peaceful life. in today’s world where the growth of civilization is growing too fast and following western culture, we need more money due to the increasing prices of everything. Money can allow you to have more control over our lives, more freedom to curve out our own path, and fewer constraints on our choices. Money can enable us to provide different facilities for our family and friends, to enhance their life through a good education and the best health care, and to support and achieve their goals and dreams. In fact, the sooner we graduate from school, the greater the chance we possess to find a job and make money. For instance, my older brother, named Ali, decided to enter the job market finding a job after graduating from the high school. Working as an intern in a computer company, he could receive 500 USD per month in the first year of working. After nearly six-year of working not only in that company but also in other company, he could have gained a great deal of money as well experience to make money.
All in all, as mentioned above, sooner graduation have great benefits, including making greater money and accumulating precious experiences in different areas. though both sooner and later graduation have different pros and cons. To choose one over another would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, desires and ambitions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in contrast, in fact, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2988.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 609.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90640394089 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96768813016 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72455310986 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 212.727598566 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507389162562 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 945.0 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8497451375 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.52 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.36 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.96 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130577432736 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357722505309 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337849839809 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777495221641 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367252238273 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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