Parents today are more involved in their children’s education. Do you agree or disagree?
Needless to say, parenting is a momentous task for everyone who experiences such a duty in his or her life to such an extent that diverse books have been written about this phenomenon. Children can be prosperous persons with appropriate education and vice versa. Some say in comparison with the past parents are more involving in the education of their children; however, others take issue with this point of view. In my opinion, parents exceedingly pay more attention to their children compared with what was in the past, in the following paragraphs, I will explain my main reasons.
First of all, progress in technologies has permitted parents to help their children in comparison with the past. To be more specific, as the technology evolves and provide more and more windows of opportunities, parents can more be informed about different aspects of educating children. Nowadays, people exceedingly access to diverse sources of information, including internet, television, and radio. since a huge part of mindfulness of parents are children, they are more inclined to learn about their children as well as the manner of dealing with them. By way of illustration, a study which I read on American Scientific Website can be a superb evidence of the authenticity of this claim. According to this study, conducted in Stockholm, Sweden, the more people are being dealt with new technologies over last two decades, the more children have achieved better results in the education in the school as well as behave appropriately in the home. Although some other factors are involved in this advancement, the effect of parenting cannot be ignored.
Secondly, free time of parents have been increased, and this permits them to take more notice of children. working for parents had a great rule in the past so much so that the parents do not have enough time to allocate to their children. these days, work hours have been reduced on different grounds. My father and my grandfather are good examples of this. My grandfather worked six days in a week and nine hours per day; on the other hand, my father is working in computer company which has required them to work for six hours per day and five days per week. As a result, my father has more time to assign to his family.
To sum, although some said this fact that members of a family in the past were more intimate with each other and more cope with each other, with the progress of technology and reducing the work hours, parents are immensely paying attention to children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90420560748 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70273179381 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504672897196 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4986282418 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.611111111 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236021578212 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879954831615 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724263718664 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152452805681 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514277076594 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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