Some years ago, i came to a big city, named Tehran. which one of such a good city impress you?
1. hugeness
2. traffic
3. the people and the way they behave
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of the environment surrounding us and its remarkable importance in the modern era. Without paying enough attention to the environment, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of governors that the residents of the country survive in such a polluted world. Notwithstanding differences, in my view, by cleaning the environment and maintaining it as safe as possible, we can expect a better world for the current generation as well as the generation to come. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the human beings are getting a lot of their needs through the environment. As a matter of fact, the air we breathe and the water we drink depend on the environment and how it is clean to be consumed by us. The fishes in the rivers and the terrestrial animals we hunt in the wildlife are the striking parts of our environment. Should we take no notice of maintaining the environment in a stunning condition, we cannot find our necessities and we will die from starvation. In addition, by polluting the environment through our cars or factories making a lot of pollution in the region around them, the health of the people would be in danger. Plenty of diseases and illnesses have been emerged by the damaged environment. My grandfather is a good example of this. Some years ago, he came to the city of Isfahan, which is polluted places in Iran. While he was in good physical condition as he arrived, he is suffering from heart diseases and breathing problems at the moment.
Secondly, based on the claims asserted by the scientists in the recent years, by having a cracking environment, the amount of stress would be decreased. In fact, a wide range of people in the big cities like New York and Tehran is struggling with a high rate of stress, thereby decreasing their positive function in their career. The students have trouble learning the points mentioned by the teachers, and the housewives have troubles with their tasks, cleaning the house, buying the ingredients and so on. To be more specific, they all have some troubles releasing their stress level and get relaxed. By having a good place, such as a park in the neighborhood for hanging on with the friends and having fun with the relatives, they can come up with some stunning solutions to reduce their stress level. My family and I go to a beach, which is 80 miles away from our home just be to de-stressed and get relaxed in end of the month. Should we have not such a place to get relaxed for sometimes, it is so unlikely to survive in the hectic style of the city we are living in.
All in all, by having a good environment and trying to keep that in a fine condition for a long time, not only can we reduce our stress level properly, but also live for a longer time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 587, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding region'?
Suggestion: the surrounding region
... factories making a lot of pollution in the region around them, the health of the people would be in d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, i feel, in addition, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, by and large, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60665362035 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76882229303 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502935420744 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2175848144 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.095238095 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11785535097 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377256519635 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566571854302 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0602721781624 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311725772059 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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