Secondly, when the teachers and students deal with each other for a longer period of time. Do you agree or not?
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of gaining information and its importance. Without a stunning plan to get information, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of the individuals that they can make improvements in this age and time. Notwithstanding differences, in my view, what is happening all over the world, even the farthest regions, is of greatest importance to make some cracking ideas for our career. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by getting information and news from all over the world, the people can guarantee their survival and success in the future, in terms of financial matters. Avicenna, who was a polymath in the past, once said that “the best ways one person can develop his or her success is to find new ways to be successful.” Nowadays, as the technology evolves and creates more and more windows of opportunities, the new methods have been emerged to help us have an easier lifestyle, as compared to the case that was in the past. The one who is going to be prosperous in this age and time should keep up with these new technologies and innovations. The Amazon website is a compelling example of this. Having some restrictions in terms of importing the different products from other countries, my county, Iran, have to consume just the national products. In this condition, some financial experts decided to establish a website, named Digikala, which was so similar to Amazon website and started to spread the national products from all over the country. Being the first one in this field, this website has made plenty of benefits in the recent years.
Secondly, getting informed as to what just is happening throughout the planet can help us promoting the children skills inside and outside the academic environment. The children, nowadays, are more innovative and imaginative and are more inclined to learn new things, besides those that they learn in the schools. Without the proper information, which they can achieve from the news from all over the world, it is significantly unlikely that they can keep pace with their mates in the other regions. For instance, my brother’s school is one of the most notable successful ones in my country. In actuality, his founder is a woman, who graduated from the University Michigan, in the U.S. Due to her expertise and job knowledge, she founded a great school based on the electrical teaching. After nearly six years since then, some other people founded the same projects in the other areas. Therefore, it can be realized that by getting new information, as well as imitating, the new technologies, we can provide new facilities and conveniences for the students, ranging from elementary students to the higher ones.
To sum up, as mentioned above, gaining information from other regions of the world can get some great ideas, leading to making plenty of money and familiarity. In spite of that, both getting information from other regions and imitating our traditional ways offer some advantage and disadvantage. To choose one over another would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, ambitions, and desires.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the greatest'.
Suggestion: of the greatest
...he world, even the farthest regions, is of greatest importance to make some cracking ideas ...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to promote' or 'promote'.
Suggestion: to promote; promote
...ening throughout the planet can help us promoting the children skills inside and outside ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as for, as to, for instance, i feel, as well as, by and large, in my view, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02056074766 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90952456887 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514018691589 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.1537622858 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.904761905 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4761904762 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0783655385967 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.025209094371 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227047711011 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501764589714 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190488712612 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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