I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs. Which one do you think is better?
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of stress and the difficulties that can be occurred as a result of that stress. Without having some methods to overcome this chronic emotional illness, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of the individuals that they make remarkable improvements in the life. Notwithstanding differences, one of the cracking ways to cope with the stressful situations is to have patience before and after the irritating situations. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by having enough patience, we can strengthen our relationships. As a matter of fact, sometimes, we become irritated, annoyed, and defensive and may say something to hurt others. In this conditions, we do not know about the importance of patience and make irrational decisions, but by having patience, we have enough time to think about our claims and make rational decisions. My own experience is a compelling example of this. After meeting with my advisor in the new university that I was accepted two years ago, I could get to know with a different way to overcome the irritations and to be patient in the varied condition of life. He though me to breathe deeply after having a bad situation, to counting zero to one hundred before making a decision, and to closing my eyes to find a better solution to deal with different cases. By applying such techniques, I could have overcome different tough conditions during these two years, and have a better relationship with my family members, friends, and relatives.
Secondly, based on the scientists’ claims, patience can be helpful for our health. In fact, anger and stress can destroy one’s health in different ways, from the emotional matters to business affairs. Being patient, you can overcome the various problems during the lifespan with more flexibility and in a better style. Patience allows us to judge about challenging situations and make informed decisions, which we will not feel stressed out in the future. By way of illustration, my grandfather had suffered from an emotional disease from five years ago, since he moved to a big city with his family. Although he consumed different drugs and medicines, he could not defeat that chronic stress until he was suggested to control his stress in different conditions, such as the case he was arguing with my grandmother or his children. Having patience in these situations could have helped him to find some stunning ways to deal with his stressful situations.
To sum up, as mentioned above, having patience can help us to strengthen our relationships and to be in a healthy condition. In spite of that, both having patience and taking action as soon as possible offer different advantages and disadvantages. To choose one over another would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, ambitions, and desires.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 196, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nd may say something to hurt others. In this conditions, we do not know about the im...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, by and large, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2450.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05154639175 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98112815776 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507216494845 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6066192435 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.666666667 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0952380952 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186693074552 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693562501472 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155712188795 0.0737576698707 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124733052399 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101472342856 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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