Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should spend more money on improving access to the Internet than on public transportation.
As the technologies evolve and create more and more windows of opportunities for the human being, the more aids are needed to build a better country for the residents. Without paying enough attention to these aids and financial matters in the country, the advancement of this territory would depend on chance. In this regard, expanding public transportation and the Internet is of more importance in the recent years. Some people are the leading proponents of the belief that improving access to the Internet is more worthwhile; others, however, take issue with the viewpoint, instead. In my perspective, I firmly contend that extending Internet services throughout the country carries more weight. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, increasing the level of information in the society is the foremost advantage of expanding Internet services in the country. To be more specific, the more information people have, the more advanced the society would be. In the recent years, people have tended to inform over diverse news surrounding them, from sports news to political ones. In this circumstances, the Internet is a significant resource to obtain up-to-date news from all over the world. In addition, the Internet is the good resource to gain unbiased news, especially political news to such an extent that plenty of politicians acquire specific news from Internet themselves. Take the election of Iran in 2009. Because the government’s rules were kind of biased towards the specific individuals, people opposed to the government's policies and were looking for a reliable way to get the appropriate news about their candidates. In addition, the different resources of news, including TV and radio, were occupied by Iran's government. As a result, the only resource of news which was reliable was the internet. Actually, the individuals have released their news and statements on the given websites, such as Facebook or Twitter. Therefore, it can be realized that by extending Internet, not only would we inform about different news, but also we can realize being credible of that news.
Secondly, by Internet services, we can easily communicate with our friends and relatives. In fact, all of us are sometimes forced to live separately from our relatives and family on different grounds. In this regard, a suitable way which we can communicate with each other is different Web sites and software like WhatsApp and Facebook which all of them are depended on the Internet connection. Actually, not only does the Internet provide ease to communicate, but also it is very cheaper than other ways of communication such as Telephone or letter. For instance, my brother and his wife is living abroad for about three years. Back then, we were in contact with each other through telephone by which we were compelled to pay a significant amount of money. In the recent year, my brother’s wife proposed to use Telegram, which is a communication software by which we can send text messages and call to our friends whenever we want. In addition, in comparison with the past, this way of communicating is more reliable, because it would not be interrupted by different issues, such as voice interruption and so forth. As you can see, improving Internet is a good way to keep people satisfied.
All in all, although improving public transportation is a necessary factor for each country and region, people are more satisfied with Internet services in the numerous way, including extending their level of information and extending their relations with their relatives and friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...p-to-date news from all over the world. In addition, the Internet is the good reso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3049.0 1977.66487455 154% => OK
No of words: 591.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15905245347 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93056706295 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92167834885 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465313028765 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 954.9 618.680645161 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4787500269 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.925925926 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183861567805 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524043715662 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449445450337 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119918861394 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347082418064 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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