You have long been friends with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with them?
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of free time and its importance in the modern era. Without a good plan, it depends on the chance of the individuals that they take advantage of these times. In this regard, different plans have been proposed to spend free time on that. Notwithstanding differences, in my view, doing exercises takes priority over other plans, including watching television programs. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by doing some exercises during the week regularly, the people can guarantee their health. As a matter of fact, as the technology evolves and creates more and more windows of opportunities for the human beings, their style of living are turning to sedentary as soon as possible. Nowadays, a host of people are working in the institutions and organizations which do not need to do physical activities in those environments. in this circumstance, by doing some exercises during the day, not only can they maintain their health in a good condition, but also can reduce their stress level, which is a chronic problem for the modern human beings. For instance, my father is working in LG Company as a manager since six years ago. Because of his sedentary lifestyle of the employees, the owners required them to do regular exercises during the week, including playing soccer, swimming, to name but a few. Since the tuitions for enrolling in such places have been paid by the company, whole employees have attracted to such a plan. By doing this, the employees, as I can see my father, could have enjoyed a healthy style of life during these two years.
Secondly, based on the experiences I have made recently, by doing exercises in the places such as a gym or even parks, the individuals can make some precious relationship. Since the human beings are a creature with plenty of social tendencies, they are looking for expanding their relationships wherever they can. In addition to the benefits of making such relationships, by watching other people doing exercises, we can be motivated to do our best to be the same. For instance, the hypothetical idea of taking exercise made me think of my brother's situation. Being one of the well-known athletes in my city, Isfahan, my brother has different trainee since he received his coaching degree two years ago. Last year, he got to know with a beautiful girl in the gym, who was one of his trainees. After dealing with each other for nearly seven months, they married two months ago. Therefore, it can be realized that by taking exercises, notably in the public places, it is so likely that the people make strong relationships with other persons.
To sum up, as mentioned above, taking exercises can cause make different relationships and have a healthier style of living. In spite of that, both doing exercises and watching television programs offer varied advantages. To choose one over another would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, desires, and ambitions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, by and large, in my view, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93798449612 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81477554354 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52519379845 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 4.94265232975 405% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2648437042 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.166666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141222822655 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425784453367 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322403382213 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082882656055 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361934494394 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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