There is no denying that we have more access to various knowledge by virtue of fast-developing technologies. Some people argue that personal experience is more significant for acquiring knowledge, while others claim that books can provide more valuable knowledge than personal experience. However, I assert that the knowledge gained from personal experience and books are equally essential for the following reasons.
First of all, the information related to real life is more accurate and beneficial from our own experience. To be more specific, we should focus on our personal life to obtain knowledge of the real issue in our life, which cannot be addressed by the information provided in many books. The example of my brother can elaborate this. When my brother got his first job, he started some investments by using his salary. In the beginning, he bought a large number of financial books, which include some methods of investment from successful investors in the stock market. He was motivated by those stories and he tried to recreate their stories in his life. However, he lost all his money after he bought one stock that one famous investor recommends in his book. But now he turns to earn some money back because he learned from his own invest experience from last five years. Therefore, we should notice that the knowledge relevant to real-life problems from books may not be useful and accurate for our own life.
Second, there is much knowledge that we may not get a better understanding in our lives, such as some information of history and art. Therefore, books play a crucial role in this abstract knowledge, which enables us to know other beautiful things in this world. Take my personal story as an example. I am obsessed with middle ages history, which I can gain nothing from my own experience. If I were a live person in the middle ages, I could have the precious chance to witness the rise and fall of many great kingdoms. The truth is I only can read and imagine all fascinating stories and pictures from various books. Also, I am immersed in all information of paintings and painters in the Renaissance, which also cannot be known clearly by personal experience. Thus, the knowledge present in books is invaluable because they are indispensable and unique, which cannot be obtained from other resources like personal life experience.
In conclusion, the knowledge, from our real-life to old stories in history and art, are precious and valuable from both books and personal experience depends on what type of knowledge you want to obtain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 436, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...g his salary In the beginning he bought a large number of financial books which include some meth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87441860465 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63803768623 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46976744186 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 430.0 20.1344086022 2136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2096.0 100.406767564 2088% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 430.0 20.6045352989 2087% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 108.0 5.45110844103 1981% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325775693019 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.325775693019 0.076458572812 426% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233859934778 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676294600819 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 216.5 11.7677419355 1840% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -364.97 58.1214874552 -628% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 171.0 10.1575268817 1683% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.45 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 27.76 8.01818996416 346% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 174.0 10.0537634409 1731% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 10.247311828 273% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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