There is no shortage opinion on how it is important to be effective and an influencer in your field or group. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select to disagree with this statement because everyone can be a leader by practicing and acquiring experience from his life. It is my firm belief that leadership can be acquired by learning for many reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, some people are born with unnatural features like leadership, but what if the person did not bear these characteristics? a lot of people around us were in the past without leadership properties but by dealing with issues can be leaders. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. when I was at school I didn't have any leadership features, but during the next level in the university, I started to take some extra courses about how to deal with people and how to manage things around you, so after two years, I decided to take the elections in my college to be representative of the students. As a result, I won these elections because of the skills which I learned in these two years. Consequently, I provided many services for the students in my department like installing data shows, tailing the ground, painting the walls, enhancing the seats in the classes, and adding some curriculum to the school schedule. If I had more time, I would have learned more courses about leadership.
Secondly, some jobs can impress on you and force you to be a leader. Drawing from my own personal experience. My father was working in the armed forces, so he has to control over 200 soldiers in his section. He said to me he acquired these skills from his work only because he has to take care of all these people like their food, drink, dormitory, vacations, work and manage everything around him. Therefore, after my father retired he is working now in a big company in our country and he is a manager, all of this is just because he learned a lot from his work and he did not bear with leadership features.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that everyone can be a leader by learning and not from nature. This is because taking courses and workshops about leadership can enhance your ability to be a leader, and your work sometime forces you to be a leader or you will lose your job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60563380282 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70538658557 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490610328638 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6876206977 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.411764706 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183097984061 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686036600324 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609531536438 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141567520634 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663950950164 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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