Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Mobile phones have given people more freedom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, no one can actually live without their mobile phone. This amazing technology is portable, user-friendly, and relatively cheap. There is no way that we can neglect the advantages of using this precious device. I think the most important aspect of phones that affects our daily lives, is enhancing the freedom of all kinds of people all around the world, and I have reasons to prove my point of view.
To begin with, a cell phone is the main solution to communication problems such as long-distance issues and the expensiveness of face-to-face meetings. Widespread use of mobiles is leading us to talk or meet with our friends and family even if they are far away from us. Also, it is much cheaper and faster than the traditional mailing system. So there are so many constraints for you if you want to deliver a message as soon as possible and you are not that rich. this means freedom in communication, which is a basic right of every member of today's civilization.
Furthermore, most governments are trying to control the public by censoring information or limiting their social interactions, but with the extension of mobile phones, the freedom of speech is at its peak. Regardless of what people think or judge, everyone must be able to express their opinions and ideas. The most difficult horrifying barrier in reaching this goal is the power of dictators who are afraid of the voice of the public. They used to create horror or filter the real news of the world to put pressure on the community, and they had no chance of defending their rights. Mobile phones are the best tool for achieving this ideal life where everyone has the chance of talking without fear and limitations.
To wrap it up, I extremely believe that cellphones are one of the most magnificent inventions, which lead the community to freedom. Not only is it making every usesrs’ communication easier by eliminating the obstacles, but also it is one of the most critical ways for reaching freedom of speech. The modern age does not have any meaning without technology, and tech is most available for people all around the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, so, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82920110193 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78586638896 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586776859504 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.188657352 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.117647059 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170880940993 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469264371688 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330203856871 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100652752761 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028515181586 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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