Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In modern times, parents will learn more from their children than their children will learn from them.
Since the dawn of humanity, human beings have always been preoccupied with the conundrum of how to forge relationship with their offspring. While this relationship has been subject to significant alteration in the last decades, people have developed different, even conflicting views regarding how this interaction has been changed. While some people believe that nowadays children substantially contribute to their parents’ knowledge, some others stand at the other side of the spectrum, citing that parents have remained incontrovertible teachers of their children. I, however, would subscribe to the idea of the former group, in that there are certain changes in quality of parents-children relationship leading me to believe that their contribution to parent’s learning outweighs that of parents. I have a few reasons to substantiate my perspective, which I will briefly elaborate on in what follows.
First, nowadays families have become increasingly close-knit compared to the past, which is why exchange of ideas between family members have been enormously facilized, and these interactions can be quite instructive for parents. Contrariwise, in the old times families were larger in number, holding all members of an extended family under a roof. Consequently, family members did not get much time to discuss their opinions individually, and there was slight chance for family members to openly express their ideas. A personal observation of mine happens to be a compelling one in this case. I know my father grew up in a very large family, living with seven siblings as well as his grandmothers, his grandfathers, and a handful cousins of his. As I have observed the way my father interacts with his family and also judging by their anecdotes, they are not really close, which is why they do not openly discuss their ideas and feelings with each other. Moreover, his parents did not get much time to spend with their children respectively, due to the great number of family members. Had my father had a smaller, more intimate family, he would have spent more one-to-one time with his parents, and they would have a chance to learn from him.
Secondly, parents depend on their children to get acquainted with modern gadgets and devices, which is a must today. In the past, there were no significant intergenerational changes to one’s lifestyle during his course of life, so the parents did not have to rely on their children to stay up-to-date. Today, however, ability to employ technological instruments such as smartphones and computers is a must for parents in order to stay competitive in their career or even manage their everyday tasks, which is why children born in the era of technology, who are apt to using gadgets can help their parents a lot with this matter. I remember a few years ago my mother came home from work and she was really sullen. Her office mandated her to use computer for sending office letters and she had no idea how to use that. I was able to help her with improving her computer skills and she was able to stay competitive in her career. Had I not helped her with using computer, she would have lost her job.
To conclude, I reaffirm my point of view stating that nowadays children’s contribution to their parents’ knowledge outweighs the other side, which is due to closer and more intimate relationship of family members regardless of generation, and also owing to the fact that children possess technological skills that parents tend to need to learn from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2955.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 580.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09482758621 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97900451416 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491379310345 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 918.0 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.1050465833 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.714285714 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.619047619 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275235042575 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833434370041 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735607707142 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183586552429 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357433871553 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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