Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
as people regard products as an essential part of their life more and more, how they can trust advertisements has become a controversial issue in recent years. in this regard, some people hold the view that advertisements in a specific manner could become effective, while others have the opposite view and say advertisements in any way deceiving people. in my view of point, former point carrier more weight and I will try to examine below specific reasons for this purpose.
the first reason that should be stated here is that effective advertisements could become resemble a map. in general, life in the fast lane today has turned out to be so hectic and tedious that at times, people feel exhausted and have no way out but rely on advertisements presented through companies, supermarkets and so on. in fact, what people really care about first is the quality of commodity providing by them. one can trust their advertisement when their products' quality is as high as they are shown. famous personalities nowadays advertise many products, for example, they use their fame to this issue and draw attention to those products, I think as I mentioned, people can get involved and trust because the manner of advertisement is as a map.
another subtle point that deserves some words is that progress in the technology. some people would like to experience a lot of things as to the current technologies that help to improve activities of daily living. most of these things are presented by advertisements. in the past, individuals did not have access to the technology and information as nowadays have, so they eagerly try to test new things. a small example may give some light to this point, once Samsung company advertises its new version of cellphone, a person would like to has one of it. hence, he/she will go to the company's website and analysis the product at different angles and trust that the cellphone has the same features in fact.
I can not oversee the fact that discriminating choice of products introducing by advertisement makes lots of difference. How? " spend most of your children's time with computer games at the lowest cost of both money and energy", if one carefully looks at this advertisement, which we can see much today, can get some momentous points. in a positive way, that is great for parents because there is a big dilemma in front of parents when they have a child, how a child must be occupied? so this advertisement may be the key to this problem. However, there are many negative aspects to children in terms of violation, illusion, and even brain malfunction. children who infect with long exposure in front of the computer's game, will indulge themselves in a world full of violence, illusionary love, and even a pessimistic life. finally, make an informed and intelligent decision based upon our own information, intelligence, and experience is very important.
in conclusion, taking all into account, if advertisement managed very effectively and efficiently according to the requirements of customers, could become not only as a dynamic map, but also give a big chance to people who would like to experience new interesting things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in general, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03939962477 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96070975717 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540337711069 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 845.1 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8719745358 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.090909091 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2272727273 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.5376344086 433% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144060779745 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406073503759 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281323498054 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737111570906 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032977084961 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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