Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, we are continuously bombarded with commercials through all communication media. Whether those advertisements are honest in the quality of the product that they are trying to sell us or they overvalue them, though, is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the idea that the norm is that advertisements make the product look better. this position is based on two main reasons that will be analyzed thoroughly below.
Firstly, the size and other qualities are improved to show the product more desirable. that manipulation awakens the necessity to acquire it in potential consumers. For example, it is common to see banners and flyers with sandwiches that are clearly modified. An convincing example of this practice, was a situation that I lived with my son John last weekend at McDonald’s. On the wall near to the front door, there was a LED sign promoting a new pork sandwich. it seemed so appealing that was almost impossible not to notice it. Immediately, it caught my son’s attention and he wanted one of those. To make a long history short, when the order was ready, the difference was so notable that he began to cry, owingto he wanted one of those promoted in the sign, not this one. As a result, I had to spend almost an hour to convincing him that what had happened.
Secondly, the companies focus only on permeate the market with advertisement, not in the accuracy of the content of them. The competition and the desire of increasing their sales make the companies to exaggerate the feature of their commodities. A classic example of this are cars commercials. I remember one ram Ford publicity where the truck crosses a river with the water near to the window. that it a clear overestimation, but it works by creating a positive impression on possible buyers. Furthermore, not only the commercial was broadcast even 10 minutes and the picture of the ram in the middle of the river was posted around the city, but also they made memes that become tending topic in all social media. As a result, the number of sales reaches outstanding levels.
In summation, I am of the opinion that the publicity amplify the product characteristics deliberately. this is with the aim to make the product more attractive, and enhance their profits. Due to that, my advice is that you shoudn’t trust advertisements too much. If you are interested in some product find information in order to make a satisfactory decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90758293839 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9974195831 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552132701422 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7381327925 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2916666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175622026933 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441547032442 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477489172862 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116529045546 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644192275026 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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