Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
there is a part of the population that has prospered in life. If to achieve it, they have tried new ideas, or have focused only on those things where they are specialists, however, it is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that success is possible only when you are outstanding in your profession and you put all your effort into that. this position is based on two solid reasons that will be more thoroughly analyzed below.
Firstly, the better you are in your profession, the more quality your jobs will have and, consequently, people will be willing to pay more for it. Exist many examples that support this argument. just we need to think about companies or people which are in the top of their fields. For example, Nike, McDonald's, Adidas, Michael Jordan or Mr. Bezos, all of them have focused first in those areas in which they are strong and, after obtaining success, they have diversified their businesses. But, why do they do that? The problem is that, to master the necessary skills to be at the pinnacle of any field and be able to maintain that position, you must devote all your time to that. In my country there is a phrase that sums up great this idea, “Jack of all trades, master of none”.
Secondly, any business needs stability to grow steadily, and it is only possible when you minimize the risks and take safe steps. Risky situations place you in a position where you are dedicated to solving problems, not to be proactive or creative. An illustrative example of that, was a business that I tried to open a few years ago. At the beginning, everyone loved the restaurant and I thought about expanding it to include other dishes on the menu. To make a long history short, I could not manage the extra work and therefore, the quality declined swiftly and people left to go to the restaurant. Even the pizzas, which were the specialty of the house, were just a shadow of what they used to be. As a result, the lack of stability in the offer destroyed the business.
In summation, I am of the opinion that to be prosperous and successful, it is essential to focus first on those things in which you are exceptional. this is owing to the quality of your jobs is directly related to your success, and to grow in a sustainable manner you must reduce the risk of your decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59382422803 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56630798279 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524940617577 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4526714608 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226996486191 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625130266025 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655430326035 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133681436247 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177373926205 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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