Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As companies regard advertisements as an essential part of their work in order to gain more money, it is a highly debated issue whether or not nowadays, advertisements are being produced in such a way that they make products seem much better than what they really are. Actually, this topic can be approached from several angles due to its complexity. While some people tend to think that not all the products are showed off through advertisements, others seem to disagree with it. Deeply deliberating over the issue, I believe that most of the advertisements have a sense of exaggeration behind them and following discussions reveal my stand and reasoning.
To commence, my first subtle point requires to be mentioned is that as advertisement contributes to companies profit, seldom do they accept to introduce their real product. Consequently, Most of them just stick to the pros of any products they produced and do not discuss the cons of them at all. Moreover, many factories not only do not discuss the probable negative features of their products but also tried to deceive their viewers by using flashy lights in order to attract consumers. To illustrate, a large number of companies hire some expert photographers to take beautiful pictures from their products. When using that flashy pictures in advertisement it is hard for people to distinguish reality from fantasy and in that way they decide to buy that products based on what they have seen not what the product actually is.
Other substantial reason that can be taken into consideration is that, today it is very routine to see celebrities on television acting in an advertisement. Obviously, they are not the actual consumers of that specific product and they just say whatever the manager of the company wants them to say, therefore their dialouges are not trustable. The only target of using celebrities in advertisement is to persuade consumers buy the product and in that way mislead people.
To recapitulate briefly, based on the aforementioned testimonies, I am of opinion that usually companies make use of advertisements in a deceptively way and they are reluctant to tell the truth about their products. This is not to say, of course, that other points of view are completely unacceptable. However, I think my reasons are stronger.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'company'.
Suggestion: company
...is that as advertisement contributes to companies profit, seldom do they accept to introd...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...er to attract consumers. To illustrate, a large number of companies hire some expert photographer...
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Message: You used an adverb ('deceptively') instead an adjective, or a noun ('way') instead of another adjective.
...companies make use of advertisements in a deceptively way and they are reluctant to tell the trut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, while, i think, of course, to tell the truth
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09186351706 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03619524209 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543307086614 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.9227838496 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261088719969 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778145289027 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057296653913 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151539858077 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535484917129 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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