Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that
seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific
examples to support our answer. (Model 1 A/D, generally one side of the issue is
discussed, similar to the Explanation type).
Each new day in our life, we learn something new. Sometimes, we are not even aware of it, but we gain, for sure, experience through interaction with our family members, schoolmates and coworkers. Some situations are too hard to be forgotten and from these specific incidents, we pick up the most valuable lessons. Hence, I agree with the statement that hardships that seem impervious at first could be our chance to acquire new knowledge and skills.
To begin with, some problems might look like the end of the world. However, after getting through them, we find out that they were not actually that intimidating. My own experience is a compelling example on what I mean. When I used to work a part-time job at a restaurant, one of my friends at work had bad manners and he always treated me in an odd way. He tried to harass me one time by cursing with foul language during business hours, blocking my way and threatening that he might use physical force against me. As a result, I was under stress most of the time and I was thinking of quitting my job. Nevertheless, I imagined that this could happen at any workplace and the right thing to do was to file a complaint instead to higher management. Subsequently, our supervisors investigated this instance that occurred between us and issued a warning for him. Thanks to that decision that I took, our relationship got so much better now and we even became close friends. Thus, these circumstances were crucial for me to understand what to do and how to handle common workplace bullying.
Moreover, we obtain significant information through tough encounters. For instance, I had a routine to take my bicycle at night and go biking in my country. Therefore, after I moved to California. I bought a bike and began to go cycling to get some exercise at night. Unfortunately, I was not aware of the law that bicycle lights are mandatory in the evening. Hence, one of the police officers stopped me to ask why I did not have lights on. It was very embarrassing for me but the officer just gave me heads-up to have lights next time. Consequently, this was important experience that motivated me to read about all the laws and regulations in the state, not only the ones about cycling but also about everything so that I do not break the law out of ignorance again.
To sum up, the opinion that we gain precious experience through uneasy situations rings true to me. This experience could help us to take the right path next time or it could bring our attention to something that was not in our perspective before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an odd way" with adverb for "odd"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ad bad manners and he always treated me in an odd way. He tried to harass me one time by curs...
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Line 13, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that was not in our perspective before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, i mean, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67841409692 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78113946975 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559471365639 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5110217961 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45833333333 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201415869217 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510112571473 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383977359301 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126549183733 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385731809141 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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