Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important things people learn are from families.
In the past, mostly, the family was an important part of human life. Because of the fact that most people are used to work in their land mostly as farmers which had been handed to them by their ancestors, they were supposed to spend considerable amount of their time alongside some members of their families. But through development of technology and its consequences such as distant occupations, modern families somehow forced to spend at least half of their day away from other members of family. Most people are supposed to commute to their job for hours by all sort of transportation systems. Always, there was a controversial debate on whether people learn the most essential things from their families or others. I personally contend that these days, people learn most paramount stuff from other people rather than their family. In the following paragraphs, I will explicate my vantage point about the two forthcoming reasons.
The reason that crosses my mind at first glance is that in the modern era and communities people spend more time with other people instead of their own family which leads them to learn stuff from others. This could be about the hobbies, interests and jobs of people which are different than old days. In contemporary era, most people have the courage to pursue their own interests rather than burn their precious time with the people which they could not enjoy their life if even those people are their own family and relatives. In other words, majority of people realised the fact that life is short and priceless, so they are not supposed to live against their will, on the contrary, they think they should live their presence in the best possible way by all means. For example, I personally prefer to fill my free time with the people of my own age and intelligence, like my intimate friends and be with them. For me, even spending time with some acquaintances, mostly around my age are more delightful rather than my parents, and mostly this is because of personal interests.
Another equally noteworthy reason that supports my idea is that some people do not have family or have to live far from them. In this case, if people could not learn things from others, they would not be able to learn anything at all, which is peculiar and unacceptable in so many levels. It is beyond doubt that people who learn things that they are supposed to learn, mostly from others who live around them and are in touch with them on daily basis. It is because humans learn by observing the events around their environment and repetition is the most crucial point here. Furthermore, due to people’s limits, the things we could learn from our relatives are extremely restricted. We all heard of the popular sentence which tells if we want to be successful, we need to think outside of the box which is so true. The original papers revealed that by a recent social research conducted in a highly respected magazine, show that throughout history most of the brilliant and prosperous people not only had to live away from their family but also tried to avoid live beside them when they had the chance to do so, which proves the point I argued about.
To make a long story short, in my humble opinion, human being learns most strategic thing from others rather than its family. It has to do with lots of reasons which could be about the time they spend with other individuals or about the distance between the person and his/her close relatives which I discussed and elaborated about at this essay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: Because
...ly was an important part of human life. Because of the fact that most people are used to work in their l...
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Line 1, column 598, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
... by all sort of transportation systems. Always, there was a controversial debate on wh...
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Line 1, column 786, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (paramount) must be used with a third-person verb: 'stuffs'.
Suggestion: stuffs
...these days, people learn most paramount stuff from other people rather than their fam...
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Line 2, column 186, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to stuff'
Suggestion: to stuff
...ir own family which leads them to learn stuff from others. This could be about the ho...
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Line 2, column 287, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... and jobs of people which are different than old days. In contemporary era, most peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, as to, at least, for example, sort of, such as, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2914.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 611.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43631301098 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453355155483 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 888.3 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1905396595 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.454545455 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7727272727 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273093588388 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100769450494 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615241466507 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185867741264 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433282975268 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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