Do you agree or disagree that job has greater effect on your overall happiness than social life?
Need to lead a better, joyful and, happy life is one of the most paramount aspects of our life which has been prioritized over other needs of our life. People seek happiness to make their life more tolerable in order to enjoy it. One of the ways that we could bring pleasure to our life is reachable by getting a decent occupation. Another idea could be, build a more sophisticated social life with other people to make it happen. These choices could make this process a bit hard to get. I personally contend that the first approach is more useful on so many levels. In the following paragraphs, I will explicate my vantage point about the two forthcoming reasons.
The reason that crosses my mind at first glance is that by having a perfect job, we can make money, which is the most crucial part of an adult life these days. Without a proper amount of money, we cannot run our life, let alone, to make it enjoyable. We need money to provide our life with commodities that we need. I am not trying to assert that money is the all we need to have a perfect life, but lack of money would bring us some difficulties which could make our daily life intricated. In another word, money is not everything but could be a source of lots of problematic situations which we do not want to come across. Talking from personal experience, I chose to live a considerable amount of my life more spiritual by not prioritizing money, which has made me look a less reliable and responsible person on other’s eyes, and it also put an enormous amount of pressure on me when I intended to buy stuff that I needed to progress.
Another equally noteworthy reason that supports my idea is that by having a good job, we can feel better about ourself, and as a result, happier in comparison to other people nad normal circumstances. It is extremely conspicuous that working could provide us with more confidence, which plays a pivotal role in happiness. It is beyond doubt that jobs which are well-suited to a person’s personality will bring them unimaginable cheerfulness. Also, working at a job will make the person more independent, and with this independency, the person will be showered with a joyful life. By being more confident and independent, people will have the feeling to come close to us, which will make us a popular person and that would be the reason to be delighted. The original papers revealed that by a recent social research conducted in a highly respected psychological magazine, show that the grade of happiness is highly related to self-satisfaction, which comes by self-confident and independency of a person.
To make a long story short, having a proper job with a sufficient salary is vastly vital than having a great social circle of friends and acquaintances. With the aforementioned reasons (money, self-esteem, and independence, which could come to us by having an excellent occupation) living a content life is not that far-fetched. In my opinion, also by working in an environment which is profoundly intimate and friendly, a person will surround by extraordinary colleagues, which will make happiness extremely easy to get.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 178, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reasons'' or 'reason's'?
Suggestion: reasons'; reason's
... acquaintances. With the aforementioned reasons money, self-esteem, and independence, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, well, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.0286738351 254% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2609.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81365313653 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94306352895 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476014760148 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 830.7 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2614806242 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.590909091 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6363636364 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118958910025 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422531522909 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328060613725 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845644523673 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209081592039 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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