When parents cannot afford time to accompany their children, they could choose to send their children to child-care center where many children are cared together, or they could send their children to an individual caregiver. Which one is better?
In the past, mostly, children had been taken care of by their mothers at home. By the industrial revolution and its inevitable consequences, lots of jobs had been produced by factories. All the occupations could not be covered by men. Because of the aforementioned reason and rise of the living expenses, most mothers had to go to work and forced to leave their children a considerable amount of time every single day. It made the need for a system or people who could take care of children when their parents were not at home. But, always, there was a controversial debate on whether parents supposed to send their children to child-care centers where many children were taken care of together, or they could confine them to a caregiver person. I personally contend that the first solution is way better than the other one. In the following paragraphs, I will explicate my vantage point about the two forthcoming reasons.
The reason that crosses my mind at first glance is that by having our children in a child-care center, we will let them be with other people’s children and socialize with them in order to avoid forthcoming mental issues. Believe it or not, one of the most paramount reasons to lead a successful adult life is to be able to socialize with other individuals. In other words, Without having proper social relationships, we as human beings, will not be able to have the life we deserve. So, the child-care could provide a cozy environment in which our children would be able to talk with others and develop their social skills. It could also help them to have a better mental life and avoid spiritual diseases like depression, which could guarantee a better and healthy life for them. The original papers revealed that by a recent social research conducted in a highly respected psychological magazine, show that the depression and stress both have a root in childhood times and would have been avoided by more social life in those days.
Another equally noteworthy reason that supports my idea is that by sending children to a child-care center instead of an individual caregiver, people would save a significant amount of money which could be used in many ways by them. It is beyond doubt personal caregivers are more expensive than the communal systems. By that kind of money, parents could provide other stuff for their children such as toys or save some money for their future like college tuition fees. Furthermore, for most families spending money on a personal caregiver could put extra financial pressure on them, and by not wasting money on a private caregiver, they would be able to cover other living expenses. Take a personal experience as an example, when I was a little child, both of my parents had to work full time and they were not able to take care of me all day long, so they got me a private nanny, but it did not work so well because of financial problems. So then they put me in a public child-care system which was perfect in so many aspects, and as a result, they had the opportunity to use that money on other family needs.
To make a long story short, in my humble opinion, using public child-care centers for taking care of children are way better for parents than private caregivers. It is not only an excellent way to save money, but also it could give a chance to children to socialize with others, which could prevent forthcoming mental diseases which are highly epidemic these days. Also, parents could use the extra money for other life expenses, especially of their own children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 785, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...e child, both of my parents had to work full time and they were not able to take care of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, well, as to, kind of, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2933.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 615.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76910569106 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97987886753 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62273751366 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443902439024 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 929.7 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6749544536 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.52173913 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7391304348 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432171760126 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134977617576 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118261889588 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301135734387 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997971007446 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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