Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's complicated world we live in, people are inundated with a plethora of information. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that visual media significantly affect young people. There is a substantial number of people who incline toward the idea that movies and television have more negative influences than positives influences on the behavior of young people. I firmly concur with their opinion. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated upon and exemplified in the ensuing paragraphs by focusing on two outstanding reasons.
The first imperative point to be mentioned is that most movies and TV programs contain violence scenes which can detrimentally impact the behavior of youngsters. As a matter of fact, movie industries spend a lot of money to involve extended fighting and furious scenes in their movies to attract more youths. these types of movies negatively affect the mental health of young people. Perhaps one more specific and firsthand experience can shed more light on the matter. My 16 years old brother usually watches action movies and imitates the behaviors of those who fight and punch each other. He dives into the story of the movies in a way that shows a high level of anger and anxiety in his daily behavior. Not only do these movies harm his mental health but they also have caused physical harm due to the terrible frictions with his buddies. This conspicuously corroborates the idea that the negative impact of movies and TV overweigh their advantages.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that young people squander their time by watching movies and television and are deprived of doing more advantageous activities. In fact, the lack of positive physical activities and a low rate of study among youths are of the negative consequences of movies and TV programs. For instance, my little brother spends an inordinate amount of time in front of the TV. Therefore, he does not complete his school tasks. Moreover, he has gained weight that threatens his health.
To summary, contemplating all the aforementioned remarks, one could conclude that the negative influence of movies and television substantially affects the way young individuals behave. It increases the extent of anger in society and divests them of doing positive activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14659685864 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77998639083 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575916230366 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8328145234 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241981012847 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664879015013 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594069338574 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151675060746 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165310746811 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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