Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Nowadays, televisions and movies have a vital role in young individuals' lives. In this vein, many people believe that television has a negative influence on the behavior of young people, while some others hold an opposite view, stating that the positive effects of television on the young people's attitude is more than it's negative effects. I personally concur with the second group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the most important, positive influence of the television shows on the behavior of children is increasing their knowledge and creativity, playing a significant role in different aspects of their future lives. In fact, today's television shows include many valuable, useful programs such as scientific and wild-life programs, which the children could learn many new things by watching them. Moreover, the movies also have many essential issues like the results of many mistakes in lives and making great relationships with others, which could positively affect the behavior of children. I cite my experience to shed light on this concept. Two years ago, a TV movie which was in my favor taught me that I should not trust everyone whom I do not know correctly. In that film, a girl trusted her boss and told him her mysterious, but after a while, she noticed that her boss used that information against that girl, causing to lose her job. This movie was beneficial for me to improve my attitude in different situations.
Secondly, TV programs make an opportunity for young people to spend their spare time at home with their families. In other words, today's youths are subjected to face with many individuals, establishing a relationship with them, negatively affecting their behavior. The tendency to watch TV programs and following exciting movies make them allocate their time to stay at home and follow their favorite movies and have a great time with their families. In fact, television is a useful amusement for children. As an example, my brother is sixteen years old. My parents are worried about him when he is not at home and spend time out of the home. However, he enthusiastically comes back home when his favorite movies are broadcasted. Therefore, we have a great time with each other.
To conclude, TV shows and movies have more positive influences on the behavior of children than adverse effects. Not only does it increase their knowledge and creativity of young individuals, being successful in their future lives, but also encourages them to spend more time with their family rather than out of the home with bad individuals who could result in negative effects on their attitude about different things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...tive effects of television on the young peoples attitude is more than its negative effe...
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Line 5, column 933, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: losing
... information against that girl, causing to lose her job. This movie was beneficial for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in fact, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0808988764 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72978123532 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501123595506 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.2699626401 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.05 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257118204712 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772273267516 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740912397021 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192888367249 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100574849795 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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